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Granted, his plans sometimes devolve into “run for your fucking life,” but it’s the thought that counts. And whether or not you’re wearing a bullet proof vest. I think you already used that one in one of your earlier chapters. ;-) Is this leading to the infamous 'Tokyo Incident' referenced in H&K:M...

Just found one this time: Ahead of Hisao and I Hisao and me... Really good writing again, though I usually don't care much for H-scenes. I guess I might have mentioned that before. Anyway, I agree with Blackwaltz that your recent chapters seem to include quite a lot of words compared to quite little...

Two solid chapters again. Just a few nitpicks: Damnit Rin. It's like forty degrees out there. If it was 40 degrees, going out in a tank top wouldn't be a problem at all, except that you'd probably rather stay in a room with AC. Japan uses Celsius scale, like practically everyone besides the US, so t...

DanjaDoom wrote:And I wasn't aware of that. Thanks for being smarter than me, Mirage

Probably just wasting more time on cracked and similar sites...

in search of comestibles and entertainment. The two ever-present human desires. And, well, sex. But I doubt anyone's looking for that on a school lunch break. I guess you could group the latter with "entertainment" ;-) Either way, she finishes in a few seconds and closes her laptop shut. Nitpick: "...

Just one thing:

This mildly-interesting factoid of the day brought to you by Suzu Suzuki.

A factoid is a piece of information that is quite probably wrong. In the context I don't think that is what you were going for.

A pretty elaborate introduction for a mere side story - interesting

Given some of the other characters on tha list that's not really much of an acsomplishment...

Triscuitable wrote:

“Thinking about it now, I should have gotten Solus to give you a few pointers for cleaning up when it comes to live specimens.”

Had to be him. Someone else might have gotten it wrong.

Great chapter again, but this made my day

Some stuff:

- For an aphasic, Lelouch sure talks a lot...

- Really? Not even asking what kind of club it is?

- I don't think they're in the literacy club - if they are in high school, we can safely assume they are already literate.

Well, the last two chapters were certainly... fashion centric...
Still entertaining to read, though I hope you're done with describing dresses for a while

I simply use the button "view unread posts" for that...

P.S. : Is any of my stuff even worth proofreading? There are so few replies overall...

I'm sorry. Your stories are by no means bad, but I guess they're just not my thing. And my writing style is so completely different from yours that I wouldn't know what kind of advice I could give you...

Actually, I like reading the comments along with the story. It's one of the charms of reading fanfiction here on the forums

Two things. First: What’s this favor you need so badly that you couldn't ______ until this afternoon to tell me? and second: “Perfect! Consider yourself my new assistant trainer! Meet me by the weight room at seven tomorrow for your rundown.” ... “Meet me near the weight room tomorrow morning, eight...

Despite only being seven, she’s already changed into a pair of royal-blue pajamas Either Lilly is seven years old, or you're missing a word. I have to agree with Neio here - the sentence is indeed incorrect. Without any other indication the first part refers to the "she" - in this case to Lilly. It...