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A boy lives with his wealthy family, whom own a zoo. ... so I can observe Hisao, whom has been roped into working with them. It's rare for this to be used when it isn't needed. Usually it's the other way around. For the second one you could write "whom they have roped..." ...it seems the Student Co...

As for the spending funds to buy themselves food, it's not nearly as much of an abuse as you seem to think. Paying for food for a "working lunch/dinner" is a perfectly legitimate use of funds. That may be the case in your company, but I strongly doubt it would be considered appropriate for a studen...

It doesn't go into much detail is what I meant by moderate. There's no full-on love scene described here...

Huh?
Except for a few phonecalls, they hardly do anything but fuck in this chapter...
And it's not really any less detailed than in the previous chapters.

I should warn there's some moderate explicit content,... You really call this "moderate?" he places a kiss on my naval Her naval what? It's almost a right of passage. No proofreaders for your regular posts? two-thousand-two Olympics Uhhh... —she's a skier Never mind. My thoughts exactly :-D That ex...

1. Originally, there were going to be people in the track shed, doing... things. I decided that was a bit much, so I changed it to a raccoon, and I tried to be as vague as possible, being that I figured that I wasn't the only one who's mind was in the gutter. Now, I feel kinda alone. Actually this ...

I honestly have no idea what this story is about...
What is so special about a racoon?
And what is going on in the last paragraphs?
What does Hisao need his hands for and what does all of this have to do with the Yakuza?

unless there's something else I've missed...

Well I guess there were a good dozen places where you switched between tenses. That's why I said "Just one example"
I I pointed them all out the post would be longer than your chapter, so you should probably look it over yourself...

Das Team ist noch am arbeiten, allerdings geht es nicht so schnell vorwärts wie ich es mir wünschen würde.
Deshalb auch weiterhin keinerlei Spekulationen meinerseits was einen Releasetermin angeht.

So that was intentional?
Any special reason to change narrative styles between two sections of the same chapter?

There is no hesitation in Hanako's voice when she announced that I could come in after I knocked on the door. Just one example of the numerous temporal switches. I'm deliberately withholding any comments on the plot... ...except for one: “I lost track of how long it took to talk him down off the fe...

Lot's of jumping between tenses.

A little more, Nakai, and you'll convince me to get us a girlfriend.

If you're going for past tense, talking internally to oneself doesn't fit.

Is that a bad thing, though?

No, it's just why I won't make any guarantees that I'll be able to proofread everything before your planned posting date.

The answer will probably be "no"; just asking to be absolutely sure:
Will the new Ren'Py version neccessitate any changes to the script files? Any syntax changes in the direction code?

Y'know, he mentioned that when I sent him the full draft (which was like a week and a half ago), but I didn't quite see it. I still don't. I might be attached to the intent behind the description, though... The fact that I used to live in an area where the pimps dressed like the outfit you describe...

...ten minutes of the hour... Meanwhile, I've never heard it spoken any other way... you can imagine why this question seemed ridiculous to me. While my first thought reading that passage also was that there was probably an "f" missing, expressions for time vary widely by region. Where I'm from, th...