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Yeah but all the others are correct, and I could chalk this one up to some figure of speech I'm not familiar with.

Man, if Saki was a route and it turns out like what people presume, it wouldn't be the route that caused the most feels, it would be feels manifested. If Saki was a route [sic] and it turned out like in most Fanfictions about her, the only "feel" it would cause me would be anger. As for the choices...

I think SC posted the already corrected versions.

Well, I guess we can be almost 100% sure that the mom is dead - probably died in that accident.
Which makes me even more curious what could have caused the dad and brother to have turned away from the girl...

Never ever use the behaviour of anime characters - especially from Anime like Gals! - as a blueprint for typical Japanese behaviour! You will alienate every Japanese you come in contact with.

After Mayoi (Shizune's mother) married into the Hakamichi clan, she stopped being a Satou and became a Hakamichi...

I think she never was a Satou in the first place, wasn't she?
Or am I mixing this up again?

Well, having working with the railroad [all the livelong day] system before, albeit in the United States, even the best systems can have downtime ... although usually it costs somebody their job when it happens.

In Japan, someone'd probably have to commit seppuku for a twenty minute delay

Edited that, all I had to do was cut out 'from here.' I had no problems with the "from here." Might I suggest changing "that restaurant" to "a restaurant" instead? That should fix it. Which is why I felt there wasn't much of a need to follow up. Anything more than that would have just been "here's ...

Their probably worried. No, their not. They're. ...I think they heard that in 3-1.] That would be a feat, since 3-1 is for he hearing impaired ;-) “Lair.” He should practice his insults... Because your tired now "you're" About Nomiya, he's always referred to only as the art teacher, but technically...

I admitted before that the magic schools were inspired to a great degree by the D&D system, but otherwise magic works completely different here. (It's innate, you don't memorize spells etc.) In fact I made a point of highlighting the differences in the story. any trips to Faerun in the future? As fo...

Chapter Fourteen (Hisao): Two Rings to Bind Them

Hehe...

I had made a major decision regarding Hanako and I’s relationship.

Really?

“About marrying Hanako?” Kanji asked, “No shit.”

What's his name again?

... in simple, digestible format. Seriously, that’s edible paper.

Priceless!

Well, for starters, there are quite a few typos. It might help to get a proofreader. A few things I noticed several times: - Capitalize the beginning of a sentence - Stick to present tense - Beware of homophones (examples below) And for more specific things: either catch up on the tireless English h...

For all the hanako fans freaking out and the other people that just want to know more about my OC I'll introduce what he looks like Don't! Do that in the story. has lived in California... 6' 3.5 ... weighs 175... athletic/muscular build... avid gamer (strategy and competitive shooters)... extremely...

Well, if you want more people to read it, I recommend posting it here.
I don't follow links to fanfiction.net and other similar sites, and I know several others don't either.

And that's a side of Igor we didn't see in Persona...

Your writing did improve since the first chapters. Looking forward to the next.