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...in order for this to be a "route" and not just a story, I feel it has to have at least a good and bad end, and a way to distinguish between the two. That solely depends on your definition of "route" Strictly speaking nothing that is posted in this forum is a "route", since it is all fanfiction n...

She attempts to form a square in the air with her hands...

"hand". She only has one.

You know, Kenji doesn't own a phone. He's afraid of them

My scar aches: someone saw... ... I need to find this girl and… and what? Talk with her, convince her not to tell? What possible leverage could I have? I’m at her mercy. Uh... Don't you think you're laying it on a bit thick? It's not like she has any reason to tell anybody about his scar. She doesn...

Well, seeing as he doesn't even know the girl's name it's unlikely they talked at all.
Maybe he turned tail and ran?

Regarding the tense, as Helbereth said, you are free to choose one or the other.
However, since you write this as a 1st person story, I think present tense is both more common and easier for those not as expereinced with English grammar.

Have you ever been to a department store that didn't have at least two counter attendants spraying perfume?" Well, I've never been to a store that had those, but I've never been in the states either. I can't even imagine them doing this kind of stuff in Japan. Just a minor nitpick, though. Could ju...

Well, not including any kind of valuation was basically the condition to allow us to even start this archive, so it's kind of moot to discuss whether we should start doing it.

The honorific "sama" is not one that would be used by a student adressing their teacher. "Sensei" would be more appropriate, but since you don't use honorifics for any other characters why start with Ms Miyagi? And if Cat "ransacks her entire room without even once using her prosthetic, I fail to se...

Don't worry, I'll apply the George Carlin mantra -- "write stoned, edit sober". You might want to change from "Write stoned, post, edit sober" to "Write stoned, edit sober, post." It will be, but on more of an "as needed" basis rather than expecting the reader to memorize a bunch of detail that isn...

Yeah, but usually something has to happen to make a person resort to alcoholism...
And even if someone is so drunk they can't stand anymore they don't normally become agressive if they don't already have a predisposition for it.

Nope. Script format is a huge turn-off when reading fanfiction.

Also, try to keep it to present tense. About half of your story is written in past tense^^°

Okay, you write that she has a hook for a hand which makes me instantly think of the eponymous captain from Peter Pan. Then you write that it's opening and closing, so it's definitely something different... A claw? Anyway that's a part where you should add some more detail. In general the descriptio...

Just wished I was here when everyone else was :P I would have seen KS sooner AND been on the forums when it was active :) Well, it was only more active for maybe one or two months after the release. Posting has been relatively stable since then. It's still way above pre-release levels. (Please note...