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Also, I'm betting Hanako goes on the trip, but has no fun at all, because stupid Hisao doesn't know how to react when it's practically raining girls on him. The only way Hanako is going on that trip is if Hisao reects her first. remaining friends with someone who rejected your confession can be pai...

In my original envisioning of this scenario (back in 2012!), called "Missile Crisis,"... I think you made a good choice writing this version. I get nervous about Iwanako getting the best of Emi (and to a lesser extent, Shizune) because I'm trying to keep her out of Suesbekistan, and emotionally cru...

After yet again winding our way through the labyrinthine town, we find ourselves before our final shop. Like the other stores in the village, it's a quaint little building. I understand your desire for variation, but a town and a village are not exactly the same... Memories of the heated intimacy f...

I'm nitpicking here, but it feels odd that this serious multimillionaire businessman has to get picked up by his daughter in her not-so-luxurious(?) car like he's one of "the little people." I'm curious. Where did you get the idea that he is a multi-millionaire? Yes, we know he is rich. He owns a c...

Can't wait till this one comes back to haunt Iwanako. That will sting. If Iwanako somehow learns about Emi's accident, she'll realize that they both did awful things to each other. Given what happened in this chapter, it would be hard for Iwanako to forgive Emi, but now they have a chance to forgiv...

she doesn’t want to be in the car when him and Akira start going at it. "he and Akira" Actually, there are several ways he could have phrased that. His original statement is in proper form, as is your correction of "he and Akira." Other replacements that could be used are "Akira and he" and "Akira ...

Reese8 wrote:

bhtooefr wrote:Stonefish as a ship name would mean that Iwanako would practice self-love.

Surely you mean Stoneflower?

...Oops! Memory glitch there; you are correct. Yes, Stoneflower.

Stoneflower? And who would Iwahana be?
Hanako translates as flower-child.

You're 6th on the fanfic board in terms of replies and 22nd in terms of views (considering at this point there's 800+ topics on this board, that's no small feat). Both are not reliable indicators for either quality or fame of a story, but I agree that you should not fear comparison with any of the ...

Also also, how do you forbid someone from attending a festival? Easy. Confine her to her room on that day. Also, I imagine Emi must be absolutely devastated. Not only because she was thoroughly chewed out by Iwanako, but because she was forced off the track team. No more Emi at her Emiest. No, Iwan...

she doesn’t want to be in the car when him and Akira start going at it.

"he and Akira"

He did, at the very least, stand up to my "huge douche" standard.

He actually exceeded mine.

How are you any different from a drunk driver who only feels bad after he finally spins out and murders half a family? Ouch! I can't wait for the conversation between Iwanako and Lilly. I can't help but feel they will get along well. You think so? I can't really picture Lilly getting along with som...

Hoitash wrote:I promise this is going in a good direction.

It wouldn't be a suitable Christmas story if it didn't.
Nice to see you try out another genre for a change. (At least I don't expect there to be as much gunslinging in this one)

Hey, it's alive! Just my usual nitpicks: Mutou enters to a collective sigh, one in which he shares. This is correct, but I had to read it three times to understand what you meant.^^° I’ll have to wait until lunch to ask her, granted she’s awake by then. Wrong word. You probably wanted to use "provid...

Ah, okay, maybe I'll give it a try then.

A few small nitpicks, otherwise a nice chapter. The flow of the conversation was a bit strange. Usually you'd introduce yourselves at the beginning and not fifteen minutes later. Ritsu bows low to her and leaves after thanking her “Sempai.” Ritsu and Hisao are both in their final year. They shouldn'...