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Bad. Taste.

but you just kept staRing at the wall.

Let me guess: You used search and replace to capitalize every instance of "rin" in the text?

Definitely nicely done for a practice piece. Good job of catching the "Rinniness"

If his parents hadn't been able to afford the tuition, probably either health care would have filled in or there would have been some kind of scholarship - after all Hanako managed to get admitted to Yamaku as well. There might also be other less prestigious and expensive schools that meet his requi...

Allow me to fill in for Spunky Six for now ;-) I like Emi in her cute little ways but at the same time she just seems flat out rude. Well, yes, Emi is rude in that scene in the kitchen - but not nearly as rude as Hanako is in her bad ending. The main difference is that Emi's route gives you a chance...

"Please stay" was heavily meant to imply "as long as we're still alive" so unless something goes horribly wrong all of a sudden due to a freak occurrence, I see such a simple request as the catalyst for a very strong long-term bond between the two of them. Interesting. You and I got completely diff...

A few comments: The first paragraph might be a bit too much detail. While detail is usually a good thing, in this case it doesn't quite fit. Apart from the fact that the first thing you told someone who just woke up from a coma probably wouldn't be all the gory details of their accident, it's quite ...

The first one who put Saki in a fashin club was themocaw. He's also the one who made her into a bitch.

Don't worry, SC won't kill a Fanfiction thread because others violate the rules there.
He might hand out tempbans to the worst offenders, though.

...to make up the short distance between Emi and I.

You know what this is about, don't you?

Great ending to a great story. I especially liked the scenes with Rin in the beginning.
Thanks for not feeling obligated to fill in every last irrelevant detail.

That's, right now, what I'm really interested in though. I've always been thinking about AU scenarios were a completely healthy Hisao meets any of the girls or vice versa. Well, visiting a close friend who had to transfer to Yamaku would certainly provide an opportunity for a healthy Hisao to meet ...

Maybe Kenji, because a Emi x Kenji route would be hilarious. Check the one Helbereth is writing... Out of the 5(6) canon girls Emi would indeed be best suited. Rin is not suited to be a protagonist for obvious reasons. Lilly would be highly experimental - and not really a visual novel in any case. ...

Hisao starts in Yamaku in the beginning of June, not July. And while seven weeks might be just barely plausible, I don't think they would push his recovery so much just so he can enter a new school only two or three weeks before the summer break. It would be better to allow his injury more time to h...

You're off to a very good start. One thing that might or might not be intentional: Your story starts in April.With an injury like that your OC is not likely to arrive at Yamaku before the summer holidays. By then Lilly will already be in Scotland etc. As I said, you might have it planned that way, b...

I admit I didn't really read anything past entry one.
It's basically a summary of each scene in reverse order - nothing anyone who has read the VN won't know - with a few comments by some narrator we know nothing about...
Kudos for trying something new, but this somehow simply didn't speak to me.

Darklord13 wrote:Ty for letting me know about that, but has he decided WHEN he will write the next?

He hasn't even decided if he will write a "next"