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“I started painting it last year. Just before Lilly died.”

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So... Everyone interacted with Lilly's ghost all the time?

Yes, I am aware of the second meaning of "ordinance"... What I wasn't aware of is that there are places that have regulation for how much light you can have on in the evenings^^° And people say Germany has too many regulations... Here, as long as you're not pointing skybeams or laserpointers at airc...

The summer air was slightly cooler than the day...

And at night it's colder than outside?

and avoid violating lighting ordinances.

What's that supposed to mean?

Rather short chapter compared to your usual ones, but that's okay; that way I can read it in one go^^

That was... interesting.
While I got the references to Shakespeare, I'm afraid I'm not sure about the one about Kurosawa, and his filmography is too lare to look up all of his works.
Also not 100% sure if the "lady of two voices" is supposed to be Shizune or someone else...

Okay... a bit too much flowery language at the beginning: Sometimes how I curse thee for thy gifts you bestow... the clammy, sticky sensation on my skin is soothed away I decide to indulge myself in the bath I float serenely in the water Any one of those would be okay (exept for the first one - that...

ksfan1989 wrote:It's a bit disingenuous to advance something written a century and a half ago as an example to be followed.

I don't think BlackWaltz meant this to be an example to be followed... At least I hope he didn't.

I’ve just finished brewing the tea and taking my pills when the door knocks. It does? Interesting doors they have there ;-) Besides I’m assuming you have a plus one invitation in there too?” Arashi gives me a single hesitant nod. Not a wise move if she intends to marry him off to somepne particular...

Let's just say you and I disagree on that point. There's a little too much pepper in the pot for my taste. Generally speaking, it is my opinion that a sentence should require two commas only rarely, and more than that almost never. Maybe it's just whether or not you're used to them. My native langu...

I don't neccesarily see any contradiction. You can identify your sexuality one way and still be confused in moments of emotional distress. I'm also quite sure that Misha'd never intentionally sabotage Shizune's relationship, but her subconscious might have played a trick on her. That said it's also ...

Just as a random sample I've picked a few excerpts from chapter 26.... Oh, that's what you meant be "horrible grammar"... About those: Comma splicing may be unneccessary but it is not an error. If an author chooses to combine two sentences with a conjunction, because they describe two thoughts that...

Huh, my mistake then. We use "queue" in German, and I simply assumed English uses the same term...

And that explains why I don't remember Saber in a suit, since I only watched the original series.

Hoped to continue my post from earlier but you were too fast... Two more things to add: One, it's strange that Hisao knows his way around the city enough to choose a bar and second you play pool with a queue. All that is very much nitpicking, though. Good job with the chapter! I don't remember ever ...

Pin-striped suit? Are we thinking of the same saber? the interaction between my sister and I ...my sister and me Given that her father is a touchy subject, referring to her brother as the oldest male in the family is quite audacious... Hisao calling out Shirou on trying to date his boss' sister is t...

Care to elaborate on what you think is wrong with the grammar?
I'm certain I missed a few typos here and there, but I thought the grammar was actually pretty good - if a bit stilted in places, but I think that was intentional.

I was just writing a fic where 2 characters that don't fuck in the canon story, fuck. Well, what you did write was a fic about two characters who fuck that happen to be named Hisao and Yuuko. Hisao's heart is mentioned a few times at the beginning, but nothing more than could be expected from a hea...