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I agree, but I think this one could have done with a little less backstory. The introduction is about half of the story.
Except for that it's a cute story.

“Well… that’s a relief. I’ll schedule an appointment with the principle.” That would be hard to do... An appointment with the principal might be feasible, though. The chapter could do with a few more linebreaks and some more editing, and it might have been better to include the background informati...

Yeah, except for that one time she almost killed him.
Anyway, nice to see a new chapter here, but...

Next update introduces the first decision of this route, which I've been planning for since act 2 started, and will hopefully make complete sense.

I won't hold my breath for this one^^°

Come on guys, it wasn't that good. :wink: Well, I do think that it was the best of the four anniversary pieces... maybe i should put this in the first post of the library... I don't think that would be a good idea. The library is supposed to be an index not a repository itself. Besides it's suppose...

griffon8 wrote:

Hoitash wrote:in a world that was only just beginning to acknowledge such a type of relationship was acceptable.

Unnecessarily wordy and you didn’t want a second ‘was’: ‘such a relationship as’

"Such a relationship as acceptable?"

In that case I would assume you are definitely male, even if the nickname was female

And I think we have a winner.

Well, it's been a few months since the last update, but if i hadn't been for that decidedly un-Japanese name, I wouldn't have recognized your character. He wasn't that much of an Emo-kid in the first chapters... I pull out four one-hundred yen bills I don't think he could fool even a blind person wi...

This is one of the reasons I said that in the S:TE thread that Hanako actually had things too easy -- Hisao really did have Hanako up on a pedestal, whether she would want that or not. This. First relationship or not. But it's not solely Hisao's fault: There would have been plenty of characters who...

Well, the grammar took a noticeable hit by not being looked over, but it’s up to your standard writing quality. There were a lot of your missing apostrophes & periods and I-me confusions. And, committing what seems to have become my biggest peeve about Japanese cultural mistakes, you had Hisao leav...

"I'm sorry, Hanako, but...maybe you just don't know how...frustrating that's been for me. Remember the other day, when I told you I was trying to move forward with my life, but people weren't letting me do that?" I nod hesitantly, and he continues, "This is what I meant. It feels like I've had this...

“If I remember my time with the college Occult Club right, zombies were originally African. So why would she be speaking Spanish? Wait, you remember the Pirates of the Caribbean movies? There was that voodoo woman… that’s it,” Hisao snapped his fingers, “Voodoo! She’s a witch doctor, which means sh...

All that reminiscing at the beginning has a few jumbled tenses, but nothing major. , but, then, You know I'm a fan of commas, but this might be a bit much ^^ trepidation seemed to relax out of everyone's shoulders. I don't think trepidation can do that. I was a bit disappointed that Soon-Hee is not ...

Okay, the comments have slowed down, so I'll take my turn replying. So some time ago Sea messaged me about this event and asked if I could provide a story "until the day after tomorrow". I turned himn down at first, but the next day was unexpectedly struck by what might favourably be called inspirat...

Uh... no? So do Hanako, Emi, Rin, Kenji, Shizune and Misha also see this vision in your version? They all interact with Lilly over the course of the story. Lilly guides him to places he's never been to before. She invites him to her summer home. Not really stuff you can explain with "unreliable narr...