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Wow, he sure wasted no time getting together with Lilly, after "exorcizing" his Ex, did he? Drama's heightening and the chapter ends on a cliffhanger - let's hope your computer doesn't crash again soon :-) I wonder why Misha didn't call him out on his lie earlier if she's been able to see Shizune al...

Well from the comments I've read so far Development's angst levels don't even come close to this story's. It's still an amazing read though.
As for this story I'll comment when (or if) you've posted it here, since I don't go to ff.net.

A few comments on the story: You know every time I read a story about some character eating impossible amounts of food, I'm reminded of some Anime series. The problem is you're trying to write a more or less realistic story. Your characters are neither sayan nor made of rubber nor petite, hotheaded ...

Actually beef might be more expensive than takoyaki, but probably still not 1200¥.
But if I had to call anything in question it would be that Misha ate five helpings of anything

Skip mode will always halt when you come to a line you haven't seen before. Depending on earlier choices there is sometimes a short segment of text that is different from your last playthrough, even though the changes are sometimes minor. That might explain some of your problems, though probably not...

I agree with brythain: Good Job! As for the prices - depending on the worth of the prizes 200¥ is okay, but 1200¥ for a bowl of takoyaki at a fair is quite on the expensive side. Food - at least Japanese food - isn't really all that expensive in Japan. Depending on the size of the helping I'd estima...

"Why don't we mix them together?" I mutter sleepily. My first thought was: "A stall where you shoot goldfish at some cups" :-) My guess with Eriko (I think that Kobayashi's first name?) is that she has osteoporosis or her pain receptors are set to max. If she had osteoporosis, she wouldn't walk awa...

I was under the impression that he HAS taken the hint and is simply not too interested - probably because of one of the other two girls?

Hehe, Nakajima's behaviour would be considered harrassment if she were male

Like I said it's not some grave mistake, it just sounds a little strange - and you seem to be aware of that as well. If you are aware of it and still think it should be that way, then there's no problem. "To be supposed to do something" does convey a sense f obligation of its own, however. Regarding...

Well, it wouldn't of have taken much to seduce Takashi anyway. I mentioned this before... Takashi emerges from the chair ' s remains and pouts. "Why are you writing out what you say? It's a little strange." Fukuhara writes out a response rather quickly. Really? He has to ask that? inside, they're a...

Well, at this point Shizune shouldn't know about Hisao's condition either, so who knows what she's thinking...

No sir, nothing at all. I've been a good cripple. Did he say that out loud? There are no quotation marks, but it might as well :-) You picked something new that was always correct in the first chapters: "Their is going to be something delivered here... ...their is a disturbing lack of music coming ...

“You’re left,” he replied. You know, this means something other than what you presumably meant it to... “I swear on my sister’s heads I’ve only said it to you, and if I lie, may they go bald,” he riposted. My my, he has a two-headed sister? Or does she have even more? How come this never came up in...

Come to think of it ther IS one thing you seem to be doing wrong consistently: Yep, I really thought they would of caught... ...that must of not been cheap. "If this didn't happen, we wouldn't of met!" The correct form here would be " have " or even the shortened form " 've " It sounds similar when ...