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I'm really uncomfortable about this aren't I? I don't remember - did you give a reason why he is so afraid of prosthetics yet? Hit over the head by his mother as a child with one? "Sheesh. Well..." Takashi looks over the cafeteria for a while before snapping his fingers, nearly dropping the apple i...

No. I didn't like Shizune even back when there was only Act 1 out and nobody (but 4LS) knew about Misha's feelings for her. Her own path didn't do much to improve my opinion of her either. I just finished proofreading the German translation of her act a few weeks ago, and in some ways it's even wors...

Our path leads us to a wide pedestrianised (Is that right spelling?) Why would she worry about spelling in her thoughts? With my purchase happily, swinging from my elbow I don't usually comment on commas unless I'm asked to edit, but this one disrupted the sentence completely. You’re friends mentio...

Okay, technical side: “What’s going on?,” I asked my sister… You don't use a comma in addition to the question mark. I can’t believe how good her sense of time is, all things considering. "considered" Third chapter has a few instances of past tense strewn in. I also had to rewrite it from past tens...

Emo-Hisao. We don't see him very often...

Misha calls Hisao "Hiichan" or simply "Hisao" in this story but never "Hicchan"

A few typos still here and there, but I guess you fixed most of what brythain mentioned. Of those that are left, let me just mention this one:

Whose there?

"Who's there?"

"Thank you, dear." Does Lilly really call Hanako "dear" at any point? indeed, perhaps he was her soulmate and now they are doomed to walk this earth alone. And thus is another great Hanako fanfic (still)born... Well, maybe Lilly's illness will last a few days and she'll have to go back... He might ...

I deiced to show them something I draw, maybe it will get there attention . "decided" and "their" “Because it is.” I don’t like that answer, I Don’t like how Last part of the sentence is missing. Her twin tales flying in the wind. "tails" Besides that there are a few words missing their endings and...

You tell me. I'm not sure what I'm supposed to tell you - neither of those colours looks pink to me. I'm not good with paint, but just pretend I posted a pic with Emi next to Misha and compare the hues. Also, Emi's hair colour is officially light brown (I've never understood where "strawberry blond...

Leaty wrote:If you slightly adjust the magenta/green balance in any image of Emi, her hair definitively turns pink.

If you slightly change it in another direction I'm sure you can get it to be green, too

A few similar yet distinct words you should be careful about: bare <-> bear wander <-> wonder woman <-> women “I’m afraid to say me and you’re mother have not been entirely honest with you.” "I and your mother" - better yet "your mother and I" Hmm... given that she says her father means nothing to h...

Yes, that's "Slow Recovery".
As demonix said race Emi while being on Shizune's path, and you'll get there.

Hmm. Why would he want to do that if he wasn't flustered?

Now I know.
And knowing is…

Suzu is taking quite a risk, considering that Molly is very capaple of reversing that situation on Taro and her... Only one grammar problem, but that appears consistently: “Oh but doc, aren’t you interested in whom my toy boy is?” "who" “You absolute liar, you’re always asking me who’s with who!” "w...

brythain wrote:However, I think you need a Mirage-type editor. …, you might want to get a really cruel editor to help.

So I'm "really cruel"?
I try not to be, but since that was probably meant to be a compliment… Uhh… Thanks? I guess?