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It's almost certainly not Yuuko, since she wouldn't have been at Yamaku for two years.

Biggest problem so far seem to be prepositions: Noticing that I am not in bed, she knocks on the door of the bathroom. The Head Nurse told me that, if the police were to fail in on the search of my identity. I look at the clock which is strangely placed in on the wall behind the bed. My name isn’t c...

Four days in and he already had them write a test?
Way to become popular as a teacher ^^°

Kenji's tale contradicts the VN a bit, but as long as you're aware of that, everything's okay.

Alpaca mentioned most of what I would have said already. The grammar is not too bad at all - I've seen worse from native speakers - so it should iron out with practice. About the story - yes, amnesia is a bit cliché - especially if the OC forgets their own gender - but let's see what you make of it....

Yeah, I know that problem really well ^^°

I like to think that Misha and Lilly have grown closer in their time teaching, and as she was fast to call Hisao "Hicchan" i think it makes sense that she'd give her a nickname when they became friends. As for her personality, I think that since her personality is so set in the visual novel, it's n...

Okay, first of all, I'd prefer it if you posted the story here, but since it was just a short piece so far I read it anyway. A few issues: - Your dialoge is very monotone. Every single line begins with the direct speech followed by some short explanation. It's especially obvious since you coloured a...

So you don't speak English and you can't code, but you want to make a voiceover for an English VN? Well, setting aside my personal opinion that KS doesn't need voiceovers, instead of starting a new project from scratch, just contact one of those already in progress and see if you can contribute some...

Nice job making her condition more plausible by first pulling out something completely outlandish.
After the Innsmouth reference I was relieved you didn't take the story in that direction

The only thing I would say, and its minor, is that I hope we get more explanation as to why Molly moved to Japan, medical reasons alone don’t quite hold up. Molly's family were already going to move before her accident. Let's just say losing her legs, influenced why they moved to Japan. :lol: I thi...

I have remedial training in them, and it basically boils down to "if breathing is not a thing, stab in leg to make it a thing."

Well, the wikipedia article on that thing made it sound like the small brother of the monster Nick Cage had to stab himself with in "The Rock"

The trimester of what is technically my second year of high school starts tomorrow, Since it's spring I assume it's the first trimester... but I gently wrap on it anyway. "rap" hang up my jacket on a nearby hangar. hanger - nurse doesn't store planes in his office... probably :-) “Has your allergy ...

Hmm... I was expecting the lunch scene here.

Quite an unusual place for a time-skip... Did you post the wrong chapter or didn't anything interesting happen during lunch?

The chapter itself is good - certainly a novel way of portraying Molly.

If you like you can think of "revise" as in changing and ordering your thoughts and knowledge.

Hmm... Not at all what I was expecting after the first chapter. Mildly confusing as well. We don't know about the year this is set in yet - I first thought Ms Nakai might be Hisao's daughter, but according to his birthdate your protagonist has to be older than Hisao and his CV just doesn't contain 3...