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Sharp-O wrote:I love the idea that Hanako could be a double-agent. Out of everyone in the Nexus, Hanako is the most suspicious

It's Rokka no Yuusha all over again

Actually this was more or less the only part of the story that will include such a long monologue. The point was to show how Keiji is when left alone. I realise it must look a little clumsy and heavy, but it is meant to unveil the most basic trait of the main character, which is overthinking and cl...

Hello and welcome to the forums! First of all we have a thread with some tips for novice writers that you might be interested in. As for direct feedback to your story: The spelling and grammar are okay; a few typos but nothing really worth mentioning. You used (almost) the entire first chapter for i...

This is probably the most compelling Misha I've read since Closure, and that was written pre-release...

Even if there were 200 self-claimed short stories with >20K words on the forums, I'd still take take Asimov's word over theirs
A more or less accepted upper limit seems to be 7.500 words.

Ich glaube bei Mac gibt es manchmal Probleme mit dem Dateiformar rar.
Ich habe gerade die neue Version hochgeladen und dieses Mal zip benutzt, das sollten auch Macs verarbeiten können.

“You know the old saying; history doesn’t repeat itself but it does rhyme.” No, but I like it :-) To loved ones, passed and present. Either this is a pretty tasteless pun or it should be "past" And... printed fotos in 2018? Don't they have smartphones? :-) Anyway congratulations on finishing this s...

Short fiction...hmmm...how short is short? I think Asimov or somebody said under 3000 words was short-short and under 10000 was short. These days, 'short story' weighs in at up to 20000 words. My rule of thumb is that you can read it through at one sitting without (much) strain. Clearly, things lik...

Not gonna like, at first I thought Hisao was cheating on Lilly. I was relieved to see it was just a tea thing, even though I'm not really a big fan of the stuff(Go Team Water!). That was the vibe I was going for, I re-wrote that first part about three times trying to get it to look like they just d...

and a figure is stood outside

"is standing"
This is quickly becoming one of my pet peeves. ^^°

As bad endings go, this one wasn't too much so.
Looking forward to the good one.

Skeeve wrote:...and it's all of the girls of Yamaku that have been targeted...

Don't forget that the first vicim was male.

The shelf above the desk is cluttered with books, most of which look to be written by Kenji and his partner, Hisao Nakai. Won't she be delighted when she learns that he's "Uncle Kenji" to her... No man is an Iland, intire of it selfe... Yes, I know she's spent a lot of time in the hospital, but it ...

Yeah, Miki is a bit prescient here

“I kissed a girl! And I liked it!” She beams and I shake her harder.

“This is no time for jokes, girl! Gimme the details!”

I wonder how Miki figures this is a joke...

You think so?
Hanako is quite recognizable - especially for someone as observant as Rin...