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He should have it taken out.

A piece of shrapnel is the reason I never got to know my grandfather. He died from one left over in his leg from WW II - in 1978, 33 years after the war ended and just one year after I was born. Blood poisoning.

A few instances of past tense slipping in here and there, nothing else to criticize... ...except for the choice point. I think I've made it known that I hate such a thing in prose fiction, since it always interrupts immersion, and in this case the whole difference (as far as I could tell - I only sk...

“You're control over them. See what's wring here? Still, I didn't give in, From here on out you start skipping wildly between present and past tense. What happened? Also: Yay, it updated again! :-) Somthing that just now occured to me - isn't it strange that Tana and everyone else hardly ever talk ...

while this certainly isn’t the first thing I’ve written (trust me, I’ve been around this particular dance floor many, many times) it’s the first thing I’ve released chapter by chapter, and it’s been a great experience. Well, it certainly shows. I think this is the first time someone just appeared o...

Keine Ursache. Ich werd's weiterleiten.

Kakureboshi wrote:Death is a very serious handicap. By comparison, the boys's mental illness is a minor handicap. And he helps her. It all checks out.

By comparison, the boys's mental illness is a minor handicap.

the boy's mental illness.

boy

Oh.
That's supposed to be a boy.
Never occured to me...

This reminds me a bit of "Two Hallways" - in a good way, of course.

A shame that one never was finished...

whizzes past my father and I. past my father and ME. “Before there are any more distractions, let us part ways. I will take the right path with all four of your bags, to your dorm room once I find the dorm keeper while you take the left path into the main building so you can get all the details for...

You think Hisao has that kind of money to shell out for a costume?
Why don't you make it the rent for the weekend?

"For you… ¥5000."

I assume that's the rent for the weekend

This one felt a bit rushed in a few places - especially when you did time skips without marking them in any way.

Otherwise nicely written.

That depends a lot on what ending you are asking about. Hanako & Lilly: If Hisao gets together with Hanako, Lilly will leave for Scotland. No matter how much she promises to keep in touch that will make keeping the freindship intact very hard... Same thing if Hisao get's together with any of the oth...

dewelar wrote:From Iwanako, it was the idea that she's got romantic feelings for someone (i.e., "special people").

Well, Hisao first used "special people" to refer to all his friends in Yamaku, so using it later to refer to SO was probably a bit too misleading.
It being plural didn't help either.

Honestly, though, I think I've kind of decided my life experience as a queer woman just didn't translate well here, for at least some of you. Well, I've always assumed feelings of affection are pretty much the same whether you're straight or not. In this case it's probably more a cultural thing. Li...

Honestly, like—for some readers I just don't know how I could have possibly provided "the vibe" that Mai and Iwanako had romantic feelings without making it much more explicit (which would have defeated the point). Like what was I supposed to do, add a kiss? That wasn't what this story was about . ...

why, for example, is Tenchi Muyo not called something like "daisy" or whatthefuckever? Like isn't it weird that stories with LGBTQIA protagonists get shunted off into their own thing? Well, I'd classify Techi Muyo as "harem". It's not LGBTQ (no idea what IA stands for) but it's not the "standard" o...