Katawa Shoujo Forums

Well, thinking about protection the first time won't do them much good, if they already forget about it the second time...
Also... A H-scene already? Really?

Sorry if it seemed a bit corny, but I’m a sucker for happy endings. As long as you realize it yourself :-) Aside from the general cornyness it was quite good. Two minor comments: - When Hisao surprises Shizune before his proposal she signs something before turning around . Meaning he wouldn't be ab...

Same here. This is just one chapter but it's one of the - if not the - most likeable Rika's I've seen so far, and a story from her perspective instead of Hisao's is also a plus.
Coupled with your easy to read style I'm a bit sad this is just a one-shot...

Well, it doesn't really matter either way, does it?
So let's just agree to disagree.

K sollte es eigentlich sein - deutsche Schreibweise für die deutsche Übersetzung :-) Dass das Ganze sich in einem Akt häuft, lässt mich vermuten, dass wir das mit Search & Replace durchgegangen sind und dabei die eine Datei vergessen haben. Ich kümmere mich drum das zu korrigieren. Danke für deine H...

That's not population density, that's rate of evacuees per resident.

Also the terms "suburb" or "city-ward" don't appear in the VN even once.
When they go shopping they don't go "downtown"; they go to the city.
It's pretty unambiguous throughout the VN.

Well, yes, Hisao's transformation to delinquent was a bit (okay, "very") quick, but at least your story continues to be refreshingly different

They always walk down to the town below the hill. They always take the bus when they go to the city for shopping or to visit Meiko. The city and the town are two distinct locations in the VN. It's something we paid a lot of attention to in the translation. They are described differently. For example...

Nice chapter. Lilly's story was a bit anticlimactic, but that's okay. Now let's wait for Hisao's... Not that many errors either: what happened with Hanako and I.” As an English teacher, I don't think Lilly wouldmake that mistake :-) The Hanako you knew and the one that exists day are very different ...

Well, that location does not really fit what we see in the VN. There the town below Yamaku and the city are two seperate locations that are not in walking distance of each other. So if the locations in the VN are based on this it's likely that the town at the foot of the hill was later inserted and ...

Vielen Dank für deine Korrekturen. Ich habe sie eingearbeitet und werde bei Gelegenheit die Datei im Downloadverzeichnis austauschen - wenn du bei Rin nichts mehr findest :-) Zu deinen einzelnen Anmerkungen: H4: Das Komma ist so beabsichtigt. Ich finde, es ist fürchterlicher Stil, einen Satz mit "Ab...

Hmm...This chapter makes Midori seem to be quite the unreliable narrator

It is indeed very like your writing style, Umber - probably not something I should have read so late at night...

An Emi route going off Lilly's bad end? You do realize this is going to draw comparisons to Developments, do you? Well, if that doesn't faze you, I will certainly continue reading, since the first chapter was promising. Yes, Emi did overreact a bit, but... Well... It's Emi, and she's been known to d...

So this time i wrote it down, the version i would like to see. This. This is the place where I began to suspect that this wouldn't be much good. Stories written just to fulfill the writer's rosy fantasies seldom are... I read the tips for fanfic writers, and i am sure someone will want to correct m...

See, that's why movies come with age recommendations!

Your Papa can tell you about it in the morning. Just ask him about his dork-books.

And cue the nightmares about walking octopi...