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by tony246
Mon Mar 19, 2012 5:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Mirage_GSM wrote:Dreams don't need to be coherent, but try to keep one tense throughout anyway.
Ah tense usage, my old enemy has once again risen up to defy me. Well, I'll see what I can do on the weekend.
by tony246
Sun Mar 18, 2012 11:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Brogurt wrote:Is this what k-on is actually like?
No, not really, to be quite frank I haven't watched a lot of it to really know but it's not really like that I think.
by tony246
Sun Mar 18, 2012 9:43 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

I think if I were to try it'd be something like Rin having a splash of Osaka from Azumanga Daioh, and bit of Ritsu for Emi and a bit Mio for Hanako from K-on, it'd be pretty funny and fluffy. Hisao, forever the straight man... ...Damn, now I wanna read a KS comedy lol Everyone, you can thank this p...
by tony246
Mon Mar 12, 2012 1:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

We are back! And it has come to my attention that I need some concrete data on how a Japanese school year works. So if anyone has any information, please speak up. Also, it occurs to me that I am not good at chapter beginnings and endings. And I now understand the prevalent desire to have cliffhange...
by tony246
Sun Mar 11, 2012 3:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Ah, I see. Casting her into the 'follower' type role could lead to some rather interesting story telling. It could be rather devious if you write her getting into trouble from following peer pressure. Hisao pretty much does similar by changing into a person more suited to the girl by the end of eac...
by tony246
Mon Mar 05, 2012 2:57 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

To be quite frank, I looked at the third chapter as Hanako just going along with everything and hoping for the best. Which is why she followed along with Emi's plan and doing things Emi would do. Though I suppose that resulted in some strange overlap or something. Hm, if only I had more experience i...
by tony246
Sun Mar 04, 2012 7:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Update everyone: Ok, chapter...right...Um, I have no excuse. Sorry, but I'll just have to give everyone two chapters on Saturday. I just can't really think of what to do in the student council room right now and if I go at it like I did the rooftop scene, it might end up a mess again. Oh, speaking o...
by tony246
Mon Feb 27, 2012 1:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Brogurt wrote:
Legitimate criticism
Ah, I knew this chapter was too unfiltered. I'll see what I can do.
by tony246
Sun Feb 26, 2012 6:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Ok everyone, time for another chapter of stuff. And are we going to see some romantic scenes from our two lovebirds? No. Not yet. Oh, and the second chapter has been edited. Nothing new, just some rewording and stuff. Also, yes, Naomi can sign. Also, this chapter is rather...rough. You'll probably s...
by tony246
Tue Feb 21, 2012 1:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

I suddenly realize that I haven't commented on this story. And if I haven't commented then that means the author won't know that yet another person enjoys it. And if they don't know that another person enjoys it, then they might not continue it. And if they don't continue it, then it won't be finis...
by tony246
Sat Feb 18, 2012 9:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Good news everyone. It's early Previous Chapter *** Chapter 2:…What Now? The morning…what’s the word? Doldrums? Stagnation? Weariness? Well, whatever it is, the morning had it, evident by the almost zombie like shuffling of the class. It seems like I was the only person who was in a cheer— “HELLO~!”...
by tony246
Fri Feb 17, 2012 11:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Chapter updated. Will get next chapter in by Sunday at latest. Probably. Well, the first one is all nice and shiny now at least.
by tony246
Wed Feb 15, 2012 10:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

You don't know what you're getting yourself into. Now I'm curious. And probably need to read whatever you have other than the first one. And to address the whole tense thing...yeah, I am not good at first person type tense usage. Usually I tend to stick to third person and it makes tense situations...
by tony246
Wed Feb 15, 2012 12:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

Re: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

Very promising start, especially if this really is your first fanfic. One thing: You decided to write the story in past tense, which is fine, but you slipped in about half a dozen present tenses. Personally, I find it easier to write a first person narrator story in present tense. Two reasons: 1.) ...
by tony246
Wed Feb 15, 2012 2:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)
Replies: 103
Views: 24152

The Road of Adulthood (Post Hanako Good End)

...Well, I never thought to see the day that I wrote fan fiction, but here it is. Let's see how it goes. Alright, this is a Hanako pathed fan fiction. No angst or any cheap melodrama like that. This is 85% pure good feely stuff 10% funny and 6% whatever. You want some moving tears, go to the other H...