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These are actually grammatically correct the way they are. No, no they are not. Did you read my explanation of pronoun use in line 2 for Lilly's 'The Day After'? Would "Not really. It was just I having a little party during the night after school" be correct? Of course not. Therefore 'Hanako and I'...

Same reason I can't: they don't exist in their original form anymore. OP changed what was there based on feedback.

Until she showed up in Hanako's chapter, I held out hope that Lilly's handler could be Yuuko.

Trying to catch up on all this fanfic… I will say I enjoyed this story. Minor bits of editing needed, but that's expected. What I don't understand is why Hisao had to carry Emi in his arms. Emi should have put Hisao's pack on her back and then Hisao could have carried her on his back. Then his arms ...

Do you even know what we were quoting? Excuse me, quoting with modifications?

Katana slicing the table? Okay, a bit extreme, but let's see where this goes.

Completely off the rails apparently. Bait-and-switch indeed.

I didn't get any of the references, but that didn't stop it from being entertaining.

Kokblokdonia? No reference understanding needed there.

Well done. As Nekken mentioned, there are some rough spots, but it's high quality. I was glad to see you used 'bated' instead of making the common mistake of using 'baited'. Am I weird for thinking the biggest mistake you made was having Jess tip at the Shanghai? I can't imagine how flustered that w...

Mahorfeus wrote:-incoherent grumbling-

They'll all look up, saying "Make a sequel!"

And I'll look down and whisper, "No."

"In the end"? Nothing ends, readers. Nothing ever ends.

My tenth anniversary is in a couple months. First relationship that lasted more than two months.

Hitman3256 wrote:We both had a healthy adolescent sex drive, but she was ashamed of it for some reason.

That's most often caused by religious guilt.

Just noticed another problem. The festival is only two weeks away, but the issue is dated March 2007. The festival is in June.

Too bad this thread hasn't been stickied like Feuver's did.

Also, Lilly's second scene was rather pointless. When it first came up I was thinking "What? Another one already? We just finished one." And I just wanted it to be over with so I could continue with the story. It didn't serve any purpose. Sure it had a point. Lilly doesn't think that sex has to be ...

Well, naturally after reading it, I had to read it a second time. Good job. I don't know why you have that bit in spoiler tags though.

“You’re a wonderful friend and an amazing woman, Hanako Ikeawa . I’m so…” she sniffles a little, “so proud of you.” Ikezawa Today I could care less about what a bunch of strangers think about my scars. couldn't I'd say the worst thing about this chapter is that I could easily see it being the last ...

Nice and subtle. If I hadn't been looking at KS's TVTropes page recently, I probably would have just assumed it was a mistake. I've seen it put that way before instead of the proper 'back-pedal'.