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Shizune wrote:Before she cuts me head off.

I didn't think Shizune had any Scottish heritage.

Your fight scenes get better and better. Good to see not every fight depends on Hisao, too.

Total Destruction wrote:GUESS WHO ACTUALLY SPOTTED A MISTAKE WITH HIS IDIOT BRAIN:

I don't think it's within the laws oh physics

I just figured she was saying it like Scotty from ST:TOS.

This whole thing reads like a koan. There is truth here, but probably not in most of what she actually thinks is true. That's pretty much how I felt. This was very well written. It really drew me into the world of Miya. Oh, except for this: I think the governing principles are alternately: a minimu...

Having remembered how GBU ends, I can see what prompted you to do this.

And about the panties. YES. You're the first to catch it. Definitely not the only nod to the KS plot that'll be in there. Same with the souls thing. It's good to know that I'm drawing from the canon script in a productive way. Well, maybe the first to comment on it. I thought it was obvious. I look...

Just reread the whole thing to get all the changes straight in my head. The story hangs together pretty well; I'd say you've improved it.

Act 1, Chapter 1 is repeated. You left in the version with all the italics.

I'm still waiting for mine... Patience, good sir. Good things come to those who wait! I'm living proof of that :) (If I had any artistic skill besides painting miniatures, I'd do something for The Kenji Files .) I'd be absolutely shocked if it was actually made because of a fic I did, but this was ...

Oh, very nice. You are definitely improving. Even got a superhero battle in. Couple corrections: [Yes, at least, ostensibly. However, after loosing ninty eight percent of their population to a Nega-bomb… 'losing ninety' “It wasn't until I saw how much she had changed that I realized that maybe I cou...

“Oh hey dude.” Kenji says, suddenly chipper. “You caught me with my pants down.” Technically, I can't see his pants from this side of the counter, but I'm really not interested in finding out if he's speaking figuratively or not. Too funny. And 'each other' is still two words, not one. Very nice, v...

Well I must say I found that not nearly as interesting as the first part. Mostly because of how much you took from the VN. I'm a believer in the author revealing information as needed in the writing, which is why I haven't read your character info and artwork. You haven't made it a problem yet, but ...

Helbereth wrote:I'm not crazy for having inspiration come via vivid, colorful dreams, am I?

Not for that reason, no.

I find myself in the midst of my third year here at Yamaku. And that's the last time you correctly refer to her being in her third year. The very next paragraph you refer to fourth year. Also, I'd think she'd be in the beginning, not the midst. Well, not the first Rin/Emi pairing we've seen, but it...

It wouldn't surprise me. There's a whole mess of inconsistencies that need to be hammered out in this thing, and I thought I corrected the ONE screwup that I think no one else pointed out in regards to the missing hand. Another hiccup is pretty much par for the course, though I'm really bummed out ...

It looks like they're posing for a photo. Who's behind the camera? Hideaki? I hadn't really thought of it, but I'd imagine it's unlikely to be Yuuko as she'd probably have moved on by then, and Akira probably wouldn't be able to get away from work, so Hideaki seems plausible. For some odd reason, t...

Much improved. Nothing was lost by letting him sleep in.