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by Raimen
Mon Feb 10, 2020 1:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 9: Jumping Into Action (Sat, July 21) A couple of hours later, Emi and Rin were approaching the gates of Yamaku. Emi had changed into a green shirt and black jeans. Rin was still wearing her school uniform. Hisao was at the gates waiting for them, wearing an argyle sweater-vest over a white...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 03, 2020 1:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 8: Return to the Rooftop (Sat, July 21) The bell rang indicating the end of Saturday classes. Shizune was finishing writing something in her notebook as most of the rest of the class left for the rest of the day. After a minute it was only Shizune and Misha left. Misha knew that she had to ...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 03, 2020 1:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 7: Zugzwang (Fri, July 20) Hisao cleared the table as Hanako watched Lilly leave. Hanako sighed as she thought. This situation was both so normal and so abnormal. Just as she had gotten used to spending the last half of lunch with Hisao when Lilly had other duties, he’s hospitalized. Then j...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 27, 2020 2:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 6: Tea with Her Majesty’s Bishop (Fri, July 20) He was back! He was okay! Even though she was standing perfectly still, Hanako’s heart was pounding like she had just ran a 200 m sprint. She could hear her inner voice, screaming at her to leave. But there was some part of her that was trying...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 27, 2020 2:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 5: Connecting Rooks (Fri, July 20) Misha sighed as she looked around the room, waiting for Friday’s classes to begin. She and Shizune had been working for most of the long weekend and after classes this week. In addition to regular Student Council business, they were preparing for the upcom...
by Raimen
Wed Jan 22, 2020 1:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Thanks everyone for your feedback so far. It'd been encouraging! My one criticism is that the interaction between Emi and Meiko feels like it should have been longer, especially because Meiko hints that she wants to press Emi more. PsychicSpy is very perceptive. Almost ... too perceptive. Are you so...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 20, 2020 1:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Interlude 1: Hanako’s Present (Sat, July 1) Akira guided her sister Lilly along the town’s busy shopping arcade. Their younger cousin Hideaki followed a step or two behind. “Do you have any idea what you want to get Hanako?”, Akira asked. “I didn’t have a specific gift in mind. Hopefully we’ll be a...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 20, 2020 1:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 4: A Bad Day’s End (Sat, June 30) After she boarded and paid her fare, Emi dejectedly took her seat. She had no idea that things were that bad. When Miki told her that Hisao wasn’t in class this morning, Emi thought he was just taking the day off from yesterday’s embarrassment. After Miki t...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 20, 2020 1:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 3: The Hospital Visit (Sat, June 30) [What do you think Shicchan? Should we talk to the administration about Hicchan?] Shizune thought for a moment before replying, signing slower than normal. [I’m not sure. If the vice-principal came to interview Suzu, she probably came to interview Setou ...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 13, 2020 1:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 2: A Sudden Realization (Sat, June 30) For Lilly Satou, Saturday morning was a morning like most others. She took her time getting ready for class, and enjoyed a late breakfast in the cafeteria. Despite her “usual for her” late start to the day, she still arrived in class with enough time t...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 13, 2020 1:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 1: Aftermath (Sat, June 30) The next day was Saturday, and that meant morning classes before the weekend truly began. Misha and Shizune were having breakfast in the cafeteria. [Planning revenge against Hisao and his hallmate was fun, but the real planning starts today! Tanabata is coming so...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 13, 2020 1:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Prologue: Shower Scene (Fri, June 29) Friday’s classes had ended a while ago, and Emi and Rin arrived at the meeting point in one of the unoccupied dorm rooms besides Hisao’s. Both Hisao and Kenji would have to walk past this room to get to their own rooms, making it a good spot to spy on them from...
by Raimen
Mon Jan 13, 2020 1:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4909

A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)

Hello everyone, and welcome to my first fan-fic. This story is a divergent continuation to Shower Scenes , by Oddball. It asks, “What if the prank the girls pulled in the 'Wait until I see Misha in class…' ending” (the bad ending IMO) had more serious repercussions for everyone. What if it was... A ...
by Raimen
Wed Jul 31, 2019 3:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Aro's Story Thread
Replies: 10
Views: 1082

Re: In Memory of: Lilly

It wasn't the story I was expecting judging form the title, but I enjoyed reading it. At the risk of using a tautology, Lilly and Hanako felt like Lilly and Hanako. I think that putting established characters into new situations and still having those characters feel right is a challenge, and I thin...
by Raimen
Fri May 10, 2019 6:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: (Updated 7/28/2019) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - No Heart Attack]
Replies: 42
Views: 5331

Re: (Updated 4/15/2019) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - No Heart Attack]

I reread chapter 4 and 5, and it took me a while to remember the part that you removed. (The fact that myself and others commented on it helped...) Without knowing your plans, I think it's a good change. Chapters 4 and 5 still flow together quite nicely. And as you've said, you've got some room to g...