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by Suzaku
Fri Jul 14, 2017 7:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Slippery Slope (A Post-Lilly Neutral Ending Fic)
Replies: 7
Views: 1619

Re: Slippery Slope (A Post-Lilly Neutral Ending Fic)

35 chess games take a LONG time - certainly more time than you plan for this story to take given the pace you're going... But one thing: I sigh. "Don't apologize. I promised her that I'd be there for you. Given what we learned about Hanako in her route THIS is the one thing she wouldn't like to hea...
by Suzaku
Thu Jul 13, 2017 6:22 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Slippery Slope (A Post-Lilly Neutral Ending Fic)
Replies: 7
Views: 1619

Slippery Slope (A Post-Lilly Neutral Ending Fic)

I'm letting her leave. That is my biggest mistake. I never tried to convince her otherwise, and couldn't open myself truly to her. As her car leaves, I turn to the girl at my side. Her look of pain and sadness betrays her feelings. And I just let her best friend leave. She must hate me. "So what are...
by Suzaku
Sun Jul 09, 2017 9:03 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

I'm used to a forum where carp is the fill in for certain words... Clever joke. :lol:
by Suzaku
Sun Jul 09, 2017 5:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Aww carp. I replaced Aki's POV chapter on accident.
by Suzaku
Wed Jul 05, 2017 7:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Chapter 3 repost; As I wake up to an alarm beeping, I punch the alarm. I let out a yelp of pain. Dammit, maybe Mr. Nakai could fix my clock after this? Aggh, I'm too tired for this. What day is it again? I peek at the calendar I had set up. Oh, It's Sunday. I have nothing to do, and I don't wanna st...
by Suzaku
Mon Jul 03, 2017 4:50 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Mirage_GSM wrote:I'll read them once you've caught up.
One recommendation from me would be to repost them from here instead of replacing the earlier posts. Will be very confusing for someone coming late to the party to figure out what people are talking about...
Ahh sorry, I'll do that next time lol.
by Suzaku
Mon Jul 03, 2017 10:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

I have updated my first chapter, and I want to ask. Is it better? I will be updating the other chapters later, probably today or tomorrow at the earliest.

Also, how does one post pictures ere? I assume through Imgur or something like that.
EDIT: Chapter 2 has now been updated.
by Suzaku
Sun Jul 02, 2017 7:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Ok, due to the fact that I am not liking the way my chapters are formatted, and due to the fact that my approach has slightly changed, I am restarting this story. I have done this upon reading the critiques, and will try to make the rewritten chapters better based on them. :D
by Suzaku
Fri Jun 30, 2017 12:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Chapter 4: "Urrrgh." Why does morning have to come so early? Oh well. I look across my dorm. This place is pretty boring, what with the shade of white. I haven't been able to decorate it, to be honest. I go through my usual preparations. I then check my watch: 7:10 AM Ok, that gives me enough time f...
by Suzaku
Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:04 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Any merchandise?
Replies: 10
Views: 2740

Re: Any merchandise?

Honestly I'd love to own a Hanako plush doll, but I don't know anyone who can sew that won't judge me, can't order online, and I'd be judged by my whole family... Oh well. :/ learning to sew/knitt/crochet isn't that hard to be honest, materials aren't THAT expensive either and you end up learning a...
by Suzaku
Tue Jun 27, 2017 8:31 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Chapter 3: "Sis, come on!" The two kids ran through a field of grass. It was sunset, and the sun illuminated the field they were running in. "No fair, bro! You always beat me!" "Suck it up! Dinner is ready at home now." ------------------------------------------------------ Jeez, what was that dream...
by Suzaku
Tue Jun 27, 2017 5:31 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Mirage_GSM wrote:Yes, I did notice, but if you exclude dialogue you can't have other characters reacting to it...
Fair point. I'll keep that in mind. I didn't wanna bore others by repeating myself.
by Suzaku
Tue Jun 27, 2017 4:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

If she's speaking twice, what's the next line about? His response took me way off guard. Seriously, this guy is so dense. He hasn't responded at all...[/quote This is basically a retelling of the last chapter, where he responds at this junction. If you notice, I also exclude some other dialogue. So...
by Suzaku
Mon Jun 26, 2017 6:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Okay, tenses are really all over the place in this one. I think it's supposed to be present tense now, but there are at least a dozen past tenses strewn in. Also, did you have two different people talk on the same line here? "H-hello!" Shit! Gotta keep calm! Easy now. "W-what did you need?" Can't m...
by Suzaku
Mon Jun 26, 2017 5:04 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fading Memories
Replies: 42
Views: 5108

Re: Fading Memories

Chapter 2.5: (Aki's perspective) I like spending time with Sara. Sure she has some faults, like being too motherly, but I don't mind them, mostly. She also knows what I like. Other people just assume that I have no hobbies, but inreality, I like playing games. Nobody can match me once I lose myself ...