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Two wonderful chapters of course but I'm a little confused about the part where they brushed cheeks. Was that supposed to be a hug or just her getting close to whisper that phrase?

This is really cool that you started it off from Hanako's bad end! It makes sense that Miki is the only one he would talk to as well considering he talked to her during Hanako's route. The writing was really good as well, great job Chaos!

Jake Zero wrote:Someone has apparently not read Sisterhood.

I have but this one definitely has a different feel to it.

This is very unique continuation of Hanako's good end, not something I've seen before. I really like it, it definitely seems like a real possibility in canon too!

Hoping everything works out for you, Eurobeat!

Fluffy is a good way of putting it, acquireTigris, but I really liked the chapter. It still felt like their was some unspoken progress in their relationship as hinted by the old lady.

Great chapter, I wonder how the fireworks go

InSaiyan wrote:"Ha! It's okay Hisao. What's u-?" Natsumes cheerful voice cuts off with a small gasp as her eyes lock on to the unicorn on my hands.

Pretty much how I pictured Natsume:

You're such a tease but I really like where this is headed so far. I wonder what this 'research' is really gunna be.

One more that I think Mirage didn't get:

Her hands are locked together in front of hips

Her hands are locked together in front of her hips?

gibzx wrote:I mean, how many times have we seen Hisao's parents being depicted as generic japanese businessmen?

That and all the times I see Mrs. Nakai hate on the girl he brings home. That got old really fast.

This story is really cool so far, and its good to see Rika finally branching out in the latest installment!

I cannot verify the medical accuracy of this chapter so I'll just smile and nod :wink: This is a pretty decent chapter, finding out more about Hisao's conditions. We also learn more about Nakata as a person... he's unique? Definitely interesting to read through, it's odd to see the 'good-guy' Hisao ...

Your depictions of the characters are definitely unique, but I like it. I don't think Hanako is too OOC here, she does join the newspaper club normally anyways, and she didn't seem overly social here to me anyways.

The chapter was good overall, but the shopping section dragged on a bit - with four or five stores and listing what everyone was looking at for each of them. While I can understand this to a point, I feel like this helps us understand the characters in this fic a bit better in terms of who they are...

Pretty good read and definitely very unique. I must agree with Silentcook about the walls of text however, I recommend taking a look at Mirage's tips in the fanfic tips topic. Edit: I'd also like to say this made me rather sad to read through and figure out what happened. Especially the death of His...

ComeWhatMay wrote:
I just got roasted by Silentcook. Fitting, I suppose.

Well at least you predicted it right?

Love the writing by the way!