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by Gajzla
Mon Mar 16, 2015 1:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49734

Re: Miki One-shots (Updated 12/3/15)

Quick update: Happy with how this story worked out, my proofreader has deemed it 'Okay' so we shall see how it goes. As always feedback is greatly appreciated. Day One Quiet farmland slides passed the car window, as I lay my forehead against the cool glass. Grandad points out interesting landmarks,...
by Gajzla
Wed Mar 11, 2015 7:01 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49734

Re: Miki One-shots (Possible Pseudo-Route)

(Edit: Moved posts around a bit to make them neater. Feedback appreciated) Midnight Run My hand feels like it's being crushed between two molten plates, I groan into my pillow forcing the stump into my stomach. The pressure brings with it another wave of pain, but its impossible to tell if it's real...
by Gajzla
Tue Mar 10, 2015 8:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49734

Re: Miki One-shots (Possible Pseudo-Route)

I have edited the story to take some of the information that was in monologue into a conversation that should not now feel so rushed. These changes where based on your constructive feedback, so thank you. =) Not even touching spelling and grammar in this one - I suggest finding a proofreader. Yes, I...
by Gajzla
Mon Mar 09, 2015 8:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49734

Re: Miki One-shots (Possible Pseudo-Route)

I have enrolled you in a new school This may be personal, but It really halts the flow of conversation. Don't coddle your reader, there's a balance between what you need to say and what can be interpreted. Its a very fine line, but it exists. I agree upon re-reading, I’m not sure if the inner monol...
by Gajzla
Mon Mar 09, 2015 7:09 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49734

Miki: Fragments (Complete)

Having recently awoken in hospital, minus a hand, Miki Miura's life seems to be coming apart at the seams. Now with the accident a mystery locked somewhere inside her head, and a new school on the horizon, Miki will be forced to make new friends, while coming to terms with the facts of her past. Fa...