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by CloudGrain
Wed Nov 12, 2014 10:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Five Up]

Welp, there goes the neighborhood.... Interested in seeing how things will be mended. My only critique would be that there are a few instances of "sunset" where I think you meant to put "sunrise" Indeed, up in ashes. Great catch on the sunrise/sunset thing, thanks kindly! Pounded out the majority o...
by CloudGrain
Wed Nov 12, 2014 9:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Act Two, Scene Five;

Act Two, Scene Five; Boiling Point [Hisao] Yesterday... yesterday felt like a dream. That's the simplest way to describe it. Neither Minako or I had exactly confessed to one another, but I don't think that words were exactly necessary after Mina stole her first kiss from me. Sitting on the hill, kn...
by CloudGrain
Tue Nov 11, 2014 9:14 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Vision
Replies: 68
Views: 15663

Re: Vision

I have to laugh a little... The only story that I can remember concerning an entirely blind person losing their sight ended... very grimly. Spoiler for those who might not necessarily want such a dark thing revealed. In the story that I recall, which is an old one somewhere in the back of my mind......
by CloudGrain
Tue Nov 11, 2014 11:30 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]
Replies: 150
Views: 32761

Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 11/

I'm enjoying this story quite a bit. Fleshing out characters we're not as familiar with, giving new perspectives on main characters that we'd all like to think we know everything about already, it's quite refreshing. I'd like to point out that I'm definitely in the same boat as Oscar Wildecat on how...
by CloudGrain
Mon Nov 10, 2014 10:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Four Up]

Cloud the last 50% of this scene was sweeter than the peanut butter chocolate cheesecake I was eating at the time. Damn those last few paragraphs had me grinning ear to ear. "I don't think I'd mind if you held my hand anyways." Mina giggles at the absurdly late statement, squeezing my hand as she s...
by CloudGrain
Mon Nov 10, 2014 2:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Act Two, Scene Four;

Act Two, Scene Four Thief in the Night Despite how simply screwed up Sunday turned out... everything somehow, miraculously, seems to be fine by the time that I woke up and went to classes on Monday. My medicine, allowed to do its thing, seems to have the dull throbbing in my chest well under contro...
by CloudGrain
Mon Nov 10, 2014 9:21 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Three Up]

Two points about Japanese culture: 1. Hisao would never enter Mina's room with his shoes still on - especially on a rainy day like this. Usually you take them off at the house entrance. Not sure about a dorm, but definitely before entering the room. 2. No tipping in Japan. As much as I wouldn't con...
by CloudGrain
Sun Nov 09, 2014 2:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Act Two, Scene Three;

Act Two, Scene Three; Argot There are a few sounds that are incredibly universal no matter where you hear them. Unfortunately, one of the more annoying ones, and the one that's piercing through my mind right now is that of an alarm clock. An alarm clock, but not my alarm clock. I'm vaguely aware of...
by CloudGrain
Sat Nov 08, 2014 4:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Act Two, Scene Two;

Act Two, Scene Two; Routinely Unusual Despite Saturday being the shortest day of actually attending classes, sometimes is can absolutely feel like the longest day. Yesterday's storm has bled right into today, nowhere near as heavy but still gloomily managing to persist. Managing to even get out of ...
by CloudGrain
Fri Nov 07, 2014 7:25 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene One Up]

Hey CloudGrain, I made an account to wish you luck. I love your Mina. I really like how you've made her unique and she really stands out to me as a well written character. Thanks for working on this. Thanks kindly! I'm definitely flattered that you bothered to go through the trouble to make an acco...
by CloudGrain
Fri Nov 07, 2014 7:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning the blues. Act 3: Scene 2 revives from the grave
Replies: 162
Views: 32539

Re: Learning the blues. Act 2 Scene 14 up!

Well... I think that I'm speaking for just about everyone who's delving back into this when I say... Damn. That update length. The fact that this update alone is a novelette verging on a novella all by itself is impressive enough; but, even better, you're keeping the quality right up there regardles...
by CloudGrain
Thu Nov 06, 2014 11:22 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: Act Two, Scene One;

Act Two, Scene One; Unusually Routine I'd like nothing more than to say that I'm getting a hang of my new life here at Yamaku, because it definitely feels like I am. It's really not all that different from my life before I got sent here, to be perfectly honest. Since having both my parents working ...
by CloudGrain
Wed Nov 05, 2014 12:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Scene Four Up]

Very enjoyable chapter. I liked the awkwardness, and, like Mirage said, how you're involving most of the other girls as well. Looks like this is where we start to take some steps towards them dating. The only thing I noticed that was a little odd was Its Mina. Meet up @ side gate in 10? Isn't her s...
by CloudGrain
Tue Nov 04, 2014 5:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: A Crimson Route [Scene Four Up]

So cute I think my teeth are beginning to ache from the sweetness. I'm watching this route with great interest cloud, It's a shame more people aren't commenting. Minako... sorry Mina, is very vibrant a very uh... carpe diem kinda feeling to her. She seems as if she'd be at home in the KS world pret...
by CloudGrain
Tue Nov 04, 2014 3:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Crimson Route [Act Two, Scene Eight Up]
Replies: 70
Views: 16078

Re: Act One, Scene Five;

Act One, Scene Five; Festivities The lack of an alarm waking me up today is an incredible feeling. Waking up to the ambient noises outside and a rather bright room, having the ability to just turn over in my bed and relax for a few minutes before finally giving into the wakefulness. It takes more t...