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apackofbadgers wrote:Land ho!

That last Lilly portrait... I know a woman who once looked EXACTLY like that. Once thought of marrying her.

And, with the context that's now been spelled out more clearly, I think it's quite clear how everything actually fits together, but even on a re-read, I found it rather subtle - "OK, this makes sense in that context, but it still doesn't scream that they're interested in one another" for whatever r...

This is the third section of the long-lost ‘Book Five’ of the records of Kenji Setou. In the year that he first laid down notes for this section, I had known him for thirty years. We had in a sense grown into middle adulthood together, and our joys and sorrows were often shared. There is a lot that...

Speaking of queer women, if anybody wants to read some of my other writing to tide them over until I finally finish the next chapter, I wrote a silly short story called Trash Panda you may find entertaining. It's non-KS-related—it's a wholly original thing—but some people might like it. idk. It was...

I think it's sociocultural. Where I've grown up and lived, you seldom see such things as necessarily significant/symbolic of such. *shrugs* — perhaps my London filters might have worked better, except that I didn't think of putting those on for this milieu. Kind of how people behave with each other ...

I came to this story because it had an interesting concept. I stayed because the writing was/is fantastic and an amazing job has been done conveying the whole "Hisao-shaped hole" idea of Iwanako being completely out of place somewhere that was designed for a different character. I completely agree....

I actually did read every page of the Ask thread before posting any questions.

Although, I would have thought that Hanako would have a fairly expansive vocabulary because of all the reading she does. Maybe that would be a bit inappropriate for the start of the scene, because panic, and in her outburst at the end, but I think it works for the rest. Oh well. YMMV on that point ...

dewelar wrote:

Gajzla wrote:

brythain wrote: Well, my Miki is a cop's daughter, so it's appropriate!

And mine is the daughter of a criminal, lol. Funny how they both ended up with a certain weakness for drink.

I'd say it comes with the territory on both fronts .

I wuz jus' gonna say that. Also, the territory, wise guy?

But seriously, any ideas how to fix that would be greatly appreciated. I'm not an expert (disclaimer done). However, what works for me is trying to write the same paragraph in different voices and then seeing if someone can tell them apart. I do resort to some sort of mental templating based on two...

It's coming along well. I was going to say dewelar probably wouldn't mind, but then he's already said that and I realise I haven't hit [Submit] yet on this one. The reason I took so long was that I was mentally contrasting it with this scene I wrote a while back and chuckling at the contrast. :) Ha...

Something's been nagging at me for a while. Somehow, your characters seem to have inappropriate vocabularies. They sound as if they all had the same English textbooks. I'm not sure what it is. The stories are fine. The characters seem a little odd. Sorry I'm not being more constructive. I'm just... ...

d2r wrote:

brythain wrote:Here, have a very important hint. [LINK]

Hmmm...do you think this was an intentional reference?

It might not have been, but strangely enough, it was the first thing I thought of when I hit -that- scene, which is how I ended up graduating from Yamaku.

I don't jump on the mother being dead bandwagon. it's possible, but at the same time there's no real evidence pointing towards it either. Shizune doesn't talk about her family at all. You find out nothing about them until you meet them, and when you do, they tend to remain rather tight lipped about...

Here, have a very important hint. [LINK]