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by Blasphemy
Mon Dec 02, 2013 6:58 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Poll: What is the saddest good end ?
Replies: 23
Views: 3564

Re: Poll: What is the saddest good end ?

Finally playing through Lilly's route for the second time I have to say though that Lilly really seems quite reluctant to just accept that Hisao really does genuinely love her. The day after returning from their Hokkaido trip Hisao and Lilly meet up in the tea room and this is part of the conversati...
by Blasphemy
Tue Nov 26, 2013 5:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Two halves make a whole [Iwanako pseudo route] [on hold]
Replies: 75
Views: 9990

Re: —

Leaty also doesn't represent this entire forum and other people, myself included, voiced their interest in the premise. What I do think you're lacking severely is execution and I've gotta be honest that a route project like this is almost always way too difficult to do well for someone who still has...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 23, 2013 8:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303848

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 26 up 11/21]

Also ultimately the story itself is the still most important part, isn't it? It may be true that for the sake of discussion and keeping up where you left of indexing your chapters with names can be really helpful. But for the content of the story itself I'd say you can still look at chapter titles a...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 23, 2013 7:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303848

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 26 up 11/21]

Not gonna lie, looked at yours and Tomorrow's Doom's titles after writing the comment and yeh, looks like the two of you are doing a pretty darn good job at that. That said, some of the stuff seems to be too sophisticated for me and purposely not paying attention to the titles didn't make me think a...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 23, 2013 3:01 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Two halves make a whole [Iwanako pseudo route] [on hold]
Replies: 75
Views: 9990

Re: Two halves make a whole [Iwanako pseudo route]

Well that's partially because of the ludicrously fast pacing you set up in the first chapter already. And dialog like this: "Hello?" "H-H-Hisao...?" I can hear a shy trembling voice "Iwanako? Is that you?" "Y-yes, it's good to h-hear your voice again." "It's great to talk again" smooth Hisao real sm...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 23, 2013 1:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Two halves make a whole [Iwanako pseudo route] [on hold]
Replies: 75
Views: 9990

Re: Two halves make a whole [Iwanako pseudo route]

I think you should really take a look at this stickied thread: Tips for fanfiction writers (that means YOU) . I think that thread covers a lot of the things you're not doing right so far. Right now all I can say is that while I'm interested in the premise the execution just isn't on an enjoyable lev...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 23, 2013 9:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303848

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 26 up 11/21]

Since I despite getting spoiled I often intentionally avoid reading chapter titles. I mean it's possible to come up with clever titles that you cannot derive much information from until after you've read the chapter and make you go "Ah, I get it now!" but that's hard to do when you've got numerous c...
by Blasphemy
Fri Nov 22, 2013 2:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303848

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 26 up 11/21]

Nice work once again. Certainly does feel like Emi is the one right now. Either way, unless Hisao's wants to get together with Hanako right now (given the circumstances again, doesn't seem too likely) I'd say it would be best for her to go on the trip now, from everyone's perspective. Her staying in...
by Blasphemy
Thu Nov 21, 2013 11:24 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: That Guy's Epilogue Emporium!
Replies: 95
Views: 21506

Re: That Guy's Epilogue Emporium!

But, know that he works, is writing / managing two VN projects and all of that jazz, so it'll take some time. Oh interesting. His involvement makes me curious about those VNs if they'll ever see the light of day. I personally don't really want to know more about the concepts behind the mystery driv...
by Blasphemy
Wed Nov 20, 2013 9:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 2015-4-1}
Replies: 860
Views: 201009

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Iwanako, having no idea that the prevailing opinion was that Hanako ought to be handled with kid gloves if at all, walked right up to her and asked her for help. Right. I also just went back and read that passage again, completely forgot that the accident happens immediately afterwards. Now having ...
by Blasphemy
Wed Nov 20, 2013 11:15 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: That Guy's Epilogue Emporium!
Replies: 95
Views: 21506

Re: That Guy's Epilogue Emporium!

Well he did write a short one-shot on September 4th, with the note "Just a short Hanako story to refresh myself creatively. Hope you enjoy~". So I hope he wanted to refresh himself creatively in order to continue working on the Lilly epilogue... perhaps. Have to say, the first part of that one is qu...
by Blasphemy
Wed Nov 20, 2013 11:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 2015-4-1}
Replies: 860
Views: 201009

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

This kills the Emi. Excellent chapter, poor Emi got obliterated in that room :( No matter how you look at the delivery, Iwanako's message does contain some truths. Emi's behavior simply was extremely negligence considering the school she's at. Still man, while I can totally emphasize with Iwanako's ...
by Blasphemy
Sat Nov 16, 2013 8:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303848

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 25 up 11/15]

I'm not a fan of Lilly recounting so much in the beginning. In this case it feels a bit too much like she's trying to give the reader a summary of everything instead of just thinking about it herself. That may be something you should look out for in general. There have been several instances where I...
by Blasphemy
Thu Nov 14, 2013 12:58 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Recommend a VN
Replies: 1746
Views: 235523

Re: Recommend a VN

Just finished Saya no Uta and have to say I didn't really like it. The music was great, voice acting pretty good — although I rarely waited for the voices when I could just read ahead and art quality seems relatively high. However while I understand that the imagery probably isn't supposed to show h...
by Blasphemy
Thu Nov 07, 2013 4:48 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Pseudodrabbles
Replies: 28
Views: 3431

Re: Pseudodrabbles

There's the Constant Companion one-shot that has Hisao surviving and especially a certain someone does care. I really like that one.