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Oh, so just select some random places and put make them into paragraphs? I'm not quite sure what the formula you're going with is. *does his best to refrain from cracking jokes about the education system in Texas :wink:* At the most basic level, paragraphs group together related thoughts, dialogue ...

JohnnyTruant wrote:

dewelar wrote:
Did you look at the example I provided? It has seven line breaks. Your original, single-spaced one had ten. Longer paragraphs (or, really, paragraphs) help.

No, where is your example??

In my first post. I added it after I posted, so you may have missed it. Sorry.

If the second, to hell with that. You realize that you just said "the hell with making my story more readable", thus losing the interest of a good chunk of your potential readership (including me), right? But here's the thing, I don't have the time in my life to separate EVERY line in the damn whol...

Actually, more like: My father interrupts the laughter. "You’ll have to excuse me for a moment," he says, making his way towards the restrooms. As he departs, an epiphany enters my mind. It’s very precipitous, sure, but I’ve NEVER been so sure about anything before in my life. [Follow your heart/Bot...

forgetmenot wrote:The original idiom is, "With friends like these, who needs enemies?"

Emi sounds phonetically similar to enemies. So it's a play on that.

Or, more precisely, "an-Emi" .

Guest Poster once again displays legendary immunity to bad puns.

I couldn't imagine a sexual encounter between Hisao and Kagami being anything remotely close to healthy, especially considering what Kagami is going through. Yeah, that's the tricky bit, isn't it? Unless someone pulls a miracle out of their ass, this relationship is officially set up to fail in the...

I'll readily admit that I don't have any experience in this department (and that's part of why I don't write H), but it felt like the foreplay was way, way too fast to me. From zero to blast-off that quickly? Actually, that was one part I didn't have trouble with, but only because of the circumstan...

an interesting analysis. Admittedly, this was not something I'd considered when I began writing this story, but as the story has gone on it's been on my radar a bit. At this point, Hisao's arc is going where I want it to go, but it did take a while to figure out where that was. As has been observed...

Of course, a lot of it was also legitimate progress, and some of it was caused by her faking it until she made it. Ah, finally! I was wondering if/when someone would point this out :) . One of the themes for Hanako in this story is that she's made progress that she doesn't even realize she's made ,...

I am always nervous of misreading signals and making a move at the wrong time. If you look at Hisao, he is too. Emi has to tell him on the rooftop to kiss her for the first time. Knowing you're both down is almost indescribable, because a huge barrier (real or imagined) is removed. This is pretty m...

As always, thanks to all for the kind words. Also, it's always good to see new folks discovering and enjoying this story :) . I really enjoyed the dialogue in this chapter, particularly that between Lilly and Narumi. I just love the formal, somewhat old-fashioned flavor to their conversation. There'...

"Lilly," Hanako says, the strain evident in her voice, "on the night you left for Scotland...you said I could be...a strong and confident woman someday. I'm asking you...right now...let me show you. Let...me...TRY." Oh, Hanako, I wish I could. If it was about anything but this... I've been trying as...

SpunkySix wrote:

dewelar wrote:

AaronIsCrunchy wrote:http://th00.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2 ... 54hws9.jpg

Obviously, before she types, Rin puts on boxing gloves.

Is that a Strongbad reference?

Why, is Trogdor the only one allowed to make them ?

AaronIsCrunchy wrote:http://th00.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2 ... 54hws9.jpg

Obviously, before she types, Rin puts on boxing gloves.