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by dewelar
Fri Apr 01, 2016 9:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Presenting: Emi Ibarazaki)

I just finished reading Developments, and it seems to me that A Wedding with Lilly was a perfect epilogue to that epilogue ... even though it was written years earlier. *nods* Given my headcanon on how everyone's relationships continue after Developments , I could easily see this happening. Since I...
by dewelar
Tue Mar 08, 2016 6:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Now Showing—Developments!)

*nods* If there's not going to be one large story focus, I agree that splitting the group into one or two a week would be best. In reply to forgetmenot above, as I said in my own postscript I definitely appreciated your comments throughout. I can also relate to the concept "this would be a better st...
by dewelar
Wed Feb 10, 2016 11:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Pre-Closing Comments

Next up: Emi Ibarazaki—Fastest Thing On No Legs But before that, we'll allow dewelar to get his last licks in. :) Heh, yeah, I've put this off long enough. Developments was a lot of things for me, above and beyond my desire to explore who the characters of Katawa Shoujo were. As I've said before, I...
by dewelar
Wed Feb 10, 2016 3:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2016)
Replies: 33
Views: 9848

Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 2 Added 2-9-20

I don't normally correct "regular" forum posts, but since this is pertinent to the current discussion and since brythain didn't mention it: I truly do not intend to condescend. I think I have a few problems with reading your material. Here are the two main ones: 1) You don't use contractions with a...
by dewelar
Mon Feb 01, 2016 3:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Almost-Closing Comments

One thing I forgot to add. I loved the little detail about how Emi didn't want to run professionally, she's not the best and Miki could have beat her with just a little more effort. Too many writers treat her like he's the fastest thing ever. That always bothered me a bit, too, although I understan...
by dewelar
Sun Jan 31, 2016 4:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303866

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]

Hey! Very cool to see more new folks discovering this story! It took me a long while to get through this series, but I'm so glad I did. Thanks! Emi was, well, Emi! You did a great job of writing her exactly as the VN portrays her. That's very nice to hear. I tried my best to stay true to all the cha...
by dewelar
Mon Jan 18, 2016 3:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Now Showing—Developments!)

Okay, so, let's talk about this thing. I am really, really bad at this kind of thing, but here goes (before I begin I just wanna say I enjoyed the story immensely, but felt it was overly long and convoluted almost but not quite to its detriment. I'll explain below): At first glance Developments seem...
by dewelar
Fri Jan 08, 2016 10:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Now Showing—Developments!)

Oddly enough, I think I might be more critical with the stories that I really love rather than the ones that are just good or decent. I am very much the same, so I understand. Responses to come soon. I'm trying to wait until towards the tail end of the review period to respond so as not to influenc...
by dewelar
Fri Jan 08, 2016 10:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 303866

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]

I'll get to the book club discussion of this story soon, but first... I finally catched up with the story after shamelessly forgetting to check it up for updates in April. And I have to say, the ending is certainly my favorite part of the story. I seem to be kind of picky with endings. They often fe...
by dewelar
Tue Dec 15, 2015 1:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Replies: 1827
Views: 262554

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Meeting Resumes—[Akira/Lilly])

Hmmm...I think I'm supposed to be saying something here by now... So, it seems that Developments is the next of the large works up for discussion. My apologies for not being a part of recent discussions on this thread, but between holiday stuff and the seemingly ever-increasing workload that has com...
by dewelar
Wed Oct 28, 2015 3:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Bantamweights: A One-Shot
Replies: 43
Views: 9991

Re: Bantamweights: A One-Shot

From Iwanako, it was the idea that she's got romantic feelings for someone (i.e., "special people"). Well, Hisao first used "special people" to refer to all his friends in Yamaku, so using it later to refer to SO was probably a bit too misleading. It being plural didn't help either. *nods* Well, th...
by dewelar
Wed Oct 28, 2015 2:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Bantamweights: A One-Shot
Replies: 43
Views: 9991

Re: Bantamweights: A One-Shot

And, in fact, alludes to it strongly enough that even Hisao gets an inkling of it, fer chrissakes! Really? Where? From Iwanako, it was the idea that she's got romantic feelings for someone (i.e., "special people"). From Mai, it was knowing that she and Iwanako had gotten "pretty close". He hadn't q...
by dewelar
Tue Oct 27, 2015 6:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Bantamweights: A One-Shot
Replies: 43
Views: 9991

Re: Bantamweights: A One-Shot

And it's all the more vexing for me when you take into account that in Developments, Iwanako literally alludes to being in a relationship . And, in fact, alludes to it strongly enough that even Hisao gets an inkling of it, fer chrissakes! Like, who did people think that could possibly have been? So...
by dewelar
Sun Oct 25, 2015 9:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 51212

Re: Miki: Fragments (Ch.31 Posted 24th October 2015)

Well, my Miki is a cop's daughter, so it's appropriate! :D And mine is the daughter of a criminal, lol. Funny how they both ended up with a certain weakness for drink. :) I'd say it comes with the territory on both fronts :). I wuz jus' gonna say that. Also, the territory , wise guy? :D Indeed. The...
by dewelar
Sun Oct 25, 2015 9:04 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 51212

Re: Miki: Fragments (Ch.31 Posted 24th October 2015)

Gajzla wrote:
brythain wrote: Well, my Miki is a cop's daughter, so it's appropriate! :D
And mine is the daughter of a criminal, lol. Funny how they both ended up with a certain weakness for drink. :)
I'd say it comes with the territory on both fronts :).