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Really enjoyed the scene with Kenji, too. I have been fortunate that I haven't had to write much for him in my own story, because for better or worse (probably better :) ) I don't think I have a Kenji-space in my head. Neither do I normally, but if you just start thinking about things a little too ...

Another great chapter, Helbereth. Still the best OC fic I've read. I really appreciate that you've got such a living, breathing set of original characters that still feels like it fits into the KS-verse so well. It may seem funny to say this, but I actually can't wait for this to be completed, becau...

Interesting story so far. I'm looking forward to seeing what you have planned to make this a route and not just a Hisao-x-Miki story.

That said, I'd be happier with a Hanako/Hisao pairing than I'd be with a choice point. Rest assured, there will be no choice points in this story. And to all, I want to say that I really appreciate all the great discussion this story has generated thus far. That's really all an author can ask for h...

Good job :) I enjoy how you have multiple perspectives and the characters do seem very KS-esque. Very well written. I look forward to the next installment. Thanks. As I noted above, I've edited the chapter a bit, because I forgot something I should have remembered. I'll be honest...this was a weird...

"Hanako?" I can hear Hisao's voice, piercing the haze in my mind. I'm trying my best to fight down the rising nausea, trying to control my breathing. This can't be happening again... I realize I've still got a bag of rice in my hand, and I finish putting it in my basket as carefully as I can. "It's....

Otherwise...yeah, just enjoy. And here is where you reveal yourself as the biggest, douchiest troll of all time by abandoning this story. :lol: Hmmmm...*takes notes*... :twisted: Seriously, though, I'm hoping to have Chapter 13 going up no later than Monday *fingers crossed*. It hasn't reached Chap...

Mirage_GSM wrote:And this:

She finishes her mouthful with an accusative eyebrow raised...

But... but that eyebrow is dative! ^_^ Maybe you meant "accusing"

Or perhaps "accusatory".

Also:

It’s golden rays gently warm the soft breeze"

should be "Its".

Keeping an eye on this story. One thing that threw me off while reading this chapter is that you kept flip-flopping between name orders. For instance, you called your main character both "Yumi Goto" and "Goto Yumi". Emi was "Ibarazaki Emi", but Hisao was "Hisao Nakai". Pick one and stick with it, w...

Keeping an eye on this story. One thing that threw me off while reading this chapter is that you kept flip-flopping between name orders. For instance, you called your main character both "Yumi Goto" and "Goto Yumi". Emi was "Ibarazaki Emi", but Hisao was "Hisao Nakai". Pick one and stick with it, wo...

Just got around to reading this myself (as others in the thread have said, I had put it off due to what I feared the content may have been). The slightly misleading title and radical tone shift from the first chapter was intentional. I wanted to keep people off guard. :lol: Since I originally found...

Just got around to reading this myself (as others in the thread have said, I had put it off due to what I feared the content may have been). Definitely one of the best KS-related comedy stories I've read to date. I tried to keep the characters mostly in character for the majority of the story. I tho...

Whenever a story contains prophecies I'd like to tear my hair out... Even those can be extremely well written and surprise you now and again. Not very often, granted, but I'd say the chances are higher than with three/foursome fics. 8) Eh I guess there are clever ways to surprise with prophecies, a...

I keep on appreciating how carefully the character think stuff over, Hisao not immediately reacting to Hanako's announcement of canceling her trip with a generic blurt à la "why would you do that!?!" and instead understanding the importance of it as well as being acceptant to her help is nice. Than...

After taking my shower and getting dressed, I head down to the main building. After spending all of my free time last week in my dorm reading, I was starting to feel like I was back in the hospital. Even yesterday, after my run I just went back to my room and read for a while. I also officially call...