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by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/10]

A big shout-out to SemisoftCheese for proofing and giving me editing advice. Much love. Go read the Saki pseudo-route continuation ! /shamelessplug Scene 12: Crescendo I glance at my phone, checking the time- it's 4:00. The bus is late, and it's at least a twenty-minute ride into the city. I hope I...
by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/3]

Scene 11: Invitations Thursday passes much in the manner of the previous two days. By that, I mean slowly and tediously. At least it's Friday. Just gotta get through today and a half-day tomorrow, and then I'll be scot-free until Monday. Day three in a row of morning runs passed without much conver...
by forgetmenot
Sat Mar 09, 2013 3:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 4/3)
Replies: 67
Views: 23980

Re: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 3/7)

“Now what if we took hold of one end of this stick, and gave it a quick push. If we move the rod a meter or two, in less than a second, has the rod exceeded the speed of light?” After reading the solution to the problem twice, I think I know what you mean, but the question alone is impossible to un...
by forgetmenot
Sat Mar 09, 2013 3:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 4/1}
Replies: 124
Views: 28608

Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/8}

Mirage_GSM wrote:Very good internal monologue. Kudos to whoever is responsible.
Miki's internal monologue almost seems a bit like Suzu's in this chapter... perhaps our narcoleptic blue-haired sidekick is rubbing off on ol' Stumpfist, eh? I kid, I kid.

But seriously, I'm digging this fic. Props.
by forgetmenot
Fri Mar 08, 2013 4:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 12 Updated
Replies: 46
Views: 4889

Re: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 3

Hicchan is written ひっちゃん in Hiragana. With a long "I" it would be ひいちゃん It's a bit hard to describe the pronounciation of "っ" in english... Basically it doubles the consonant that follows, but it doesn't really sound like that. The best I can come up with is like "hitch" with a (very) short break a...
by forgetmenot
Thu Mar 07, 2013 8:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 4/3)
Replies: 67
Views: 23980

Re: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 3/7)

At first, I thought the premise for this chapter was kind of odd. Seemed like too many coincidences, like Hisao was kinda being pushed around by forces outside of his own control. Then again, Hisao isn't exactly a leader, per se. I also wasn't too keen on your characterization of Miki, at least righ...
by forgetmenot
Wed Mar 06, 2013 4:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 12 Updated
Replies: 46
Views: 4889

Re: OC: Mirrors and Windows.

My two cents: There are a few grammatical and spelling errors here and there, although not so terrible as to be distracting in their own right. For example, ...my well-spoken chaperon... should be chaperone , and ...that's one of Japans things right? should be "...that's one of Japan's things , righ...
by forgetmenot
Tue Mar 05, 2013 1:51 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Katawadvertising
Replies: 2
Views: 1595

Re: Katawadvertising

Savings-cat says "wow!"
I lost it. Can't stop laughing. Well done.
by forgetmenot
Mon Mar 04, 2013 8:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/3]

Whew, edits fer daaays. First of all, let me say nooooooooo not the Yuuko/Kenji ship. MOOOOOHAHAHAHAHAHA you've pretty much just guaranteed I'll be continuing this subplot, because I'm sadistic. :wink: In all honesty, I do have an ending in mind for the whole Yuuko/Kenji thing. And it's anything but...
by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 03, 2013 8:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An honest concern (Hisao & Rin, rather short, rather silly)
Replies: 4
Views: 1094

Re: An honest concern (Hisao & Rin, rather short, rather sil

This is hysterical. I can see Rin responding exactly this way. Well done.
by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 03, 2013 4:48 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 10175

Re: A Painful Past (OC) updated (3/3/13)

Just a quick note, in Japan, handshakes are generally not a customary way of greeting others - in fact, it's pretty much only used in business dealings with Americans or other people from the West. It's much more common to bow - the deeper you bow, the more respect you show for the person you're gre...
by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 03, 2013 4:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/3]

Scene 10: Waiting The day passes without much happening. Shizune and Misha barely talk during our group assignment. It appears whatever tiff they had Monday hasn't resolved. I try my best to stay quiet and get my work done without anything happening. Lunch happens, then afternoon classes. It's all ...
by forgetmenot
Sun Mar 03, 2013 1:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scar Crossed Lovers (OCXHanako) (Update 3-15-13- CH 2)
Replies: 15
Views: 3054

Re: Scar Crossed Lovers (OCXHanako)

All the above posts make good points. I'm not gonna rehash any of what was said earlier, but I do want to point out what I think is the most distracting part of your writing (partly because I struggle with it sometimes as well): you switch tenses excessively. There are multiple back-and-forths betwe...
by forgetmenot
Sat Mar 02, 2013 3:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/1]

Fair enough. Edited. Hopefully the interaction seems a little more in character for Emi, while Hisao still ends up at the same spot.
by forgetmenot
Sat Mar 02, 2013 5:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 99458

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/1]

Neither does she really pressure Hisao to open up in her route. She does pressure him to run, but note that she's blunt about her self-interest in the matter. She wants a running partner, and Hisao will benefit, so hey, bonus! I suppose this is where I think Emi's coming from. Possible spoiler aler...