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by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 8:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

She never said she was going to leave, it was Hisao that assumed she was leaving. Let's see how it goes in the VN: hi "What did you decide to do in the end?" li "My family does dearly want me to return to them, and Akira will be going as well. I could still teach as a career, whether it be here or ...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 7:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 4/3)
Replies: 67
Views: 23187

Re: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 2/26)

I really like how the story is coming full circle. I really wasn't sure how Saki would be "redeemed" to the readers and this begins the process quite nicely. Quick question though, are you adhering to the previous fan-fic's 2400 word summary of the plot? Or is the ending going to be an all new creat...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 7:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

Lilly never gave Hisao a single sign that she wanted him to stop her. She never even told him herself she was leaving, her sister had to take pity on him, and by this time there were only a few days left till her departure. If I was Hisao I'd wonder at this point if she would have phoned in from Sc...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 6:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 363014

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 2/18]

Too many things to reply to! Really thankful for all the compliments I've been getting, and all the typos that have been pointed out have been taken to mind, although I've been incredibly lazy as of late so I apologize if you checked for the correction and it wasn't made. 4-4 is coming along, altho...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 6:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lotus Child
Replies: 26
Views: 3222

Re: Lotus Child

The picture kinda makes it look like it's Hisao and Misha
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 6:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

Oh I solved that in my mind quite simply: she wants him dearly to stop her till the last minute, but dares not to think about it because it is hurting too much ;) Well, I very much appreciate the input and am saddened that you do not like my perception of the events, but I am going to keep it as is...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 6:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

I don't think she was at peace with her decision, but I did get the impression she was resigned to it by the time Hisao and Hanako were seeing her off. That's fair I guess. I guess I'm just a romantic. I would like to think that she would be holding onto the last hope that he would stop her at the ...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 4:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

... But I'm *not* arguing the point of her not wanting to go :) I was just saying that the way it has been handled (the internal dialogue, but also talk with Akira etc.) was highly Out Of Character for me. I am thinking that by the time she left the dorms, she was "at peace" with the choice, not li...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 3:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido+Finale-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/25) NEW I

Oh she did not WANT to go, but after thinking it through she chose to go because she HAD to. And yes it was because of some inaction on Hisao's part, sure, but the way presented here looks too "you did not say stay and that's the whole thing". I see it more complex than that. Well think of it this ...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 2:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/14, read 1st pos

Theory confirmed. Stopped reading there. Unfortunately :/ After reading this, I cannot really add it to my continuations, because Lilly is just OOC for me here. As long as you only added some internal thought to the canon story, it was great for me, but now (and I'm not saying you wrote it badly, t...
by centurion911
Tue Feb 26, 2013 3:12 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Saying Goodbye

"I know I have to say goodbye... I know you have to go your own way" Hanako clutches my arm tighter, an saddening juxtaposition to her statement. "But....thank you Lilly. For everything". She releases the grip on my arm as she steps backward. "Thank you Hanako, will you be ok?" I ask warmly, though ...
by centurion911
Mon Feb 25, 2013 12:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 13384

Re: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/17)

I have made a couple of decisions regarding this. 1. Writing in the story dialogue is cumbersome and affecting my ability as a writer (it's fatiguing so my work depreciates). So I will only write the scene from when Lilly leaves via car up to the Hospital scene. 2. I will focus on writing epilogues ...
by centurion911
Fri Feb 22, 2013 7:09 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Listen to your Heart. Hisao x Misha. Contains sex.
Replies: 25
Views: 11508

Re: Listen to your Heart. Hisao x Misha. Contains sex.

I enjoyed this story quite a bit. That being said, there were certain phrases that made the writing seem a bit awkward. A couple examples are "I find you very beautiful, Misha," "I become bedazzled." But the errors in general were fairly minor and the writing itself was very good. Will be watching f...
by centurion911
Thu Feb 21, 2013 8:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki Route (updated 7/17)
Replies: 145
Views: 43479

Re: Miki Route (updated 7/17)

I don't want you to think my reply was meant to induce feelings of guilt. As a fellow writer, I have nothing but support for whatever the heck you want to do with your time. You'll find no ill will here, and if you want to continue then, I'm sure, everyone here will happily and patiently wait for yo...
by centurion911
Thu Feb 21, 2013 1:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 4/3)
Replies: 67
Views: 23187

Re: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 2/17)

The theory went out the window when Saki wasn't in the Shanghai. Miki's explanation that her weird behavior was due to stomach problems did away with the speculation about it being a setup. But until that explanation was given and proven true, it felt like she was setting up Hisao for an 'accidenta...