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by Trivun
Fri Apr 04, 2014 8:27 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 03/04/2014)

Just because she's unable to express her feelings doesn't mean she doesn't have them. Her anxiety prevents her from acting, it doesn't prevent her from thinking - in fact, it may well even cause her to overanalyze things. That's fine—internal monologue is -always- more complex than external express...
by Trivun
Fri Apr 04, 2014 2:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 03/04/2014)

I'd say that chapter was worth the wait. This was one of the parts that I was really looking forward to. And did Hanako go to the bathroom for some "alone time"? :wink: Because that's the impression I got. And if that's the case, I think her room would be more private. To be honest I was thinking m...
by Trivun
Thu Apr 03, 2014 6:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 03/04/2014)

Apologies all for the wait, still beating quite a few individuals on the Internet for update speeds though, yay! Hopefully this was worth it. I'm counting around 3/4 chapters left for this, which I'll try and get done when I can! :) Act 4 – Chapter Four, Third Branch: So Here We Are Hisao and I hav...
by Trivun
Sun Mar 30, 2014 5:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

Dang it! I've been slowly reading this for the past month and enjoying it. I was hoping it would be done, but it looks like I'm going to be eagerly waiting just like everyone else. Keep up the good work Sir (or Miss/or Mrs!) Anyone try playing the game while reading this at the same time? It's very...
by Trivun
Fri Mar 14, 2014 7:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

One thing that kind of bothers me about the way this is entire story written is that so much space is devoted to Hanako's psychological problems being discussed explicitly. All this talk about "mah progress" is kinda self centered and circular, and it just gets old. A character's internal problems ...
by Trivun
Tue Mar 04, 2014 4:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

Good News: Yay! An Update! Bad News: “It's a shame,” he continues. “If she wasn't so neurotic and overworked, I thin she could be a really happy person.” Should be think. However, that's the only error I spotted on my first reading. On my iPod right now so when I'm on my computer again I'll edit th...
by Trivun
Tue Mar 04, 2014 2:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

I did say before that I would try and get an update out sooner, and I failed in that. I seem to fail a lot when it comes to promisin updates. Not sure if my 'Better than VG Cats' disclaimer will be able to hold up much longer. Then again, we are getting ever nearer to the Good End... :) Act 4 – Cha...
by Trivun
Thu Feb 13, 2014 9:05 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2014)

I've never noticed or heard of this Miki-on-Hanako business. My commonsense is telling me that it is undoubtedly nothing but crackfic , but I would be interested in the "evidence." Well, unless you call Hanako's non-canonical love for chocolate "evidence." Anyway, it looks like this is drawing to a...
by Trivun
Sat Feb 08, 2014 8:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Overdrive (Lilly)
Replies: 29
Views: 8735

Re: Overdrive (Lilly)

Very well written, and I can't find any real flaws (nothing worth pointing out at least), but I felt so uncomfortable reading that. I think the ending kind of fits, given how everyone is feeling throughout, but even so, I felt awkward, like a voyeur watching the collapse of a happy relationship and ...
by Trivun
Wed Feb 05, 2014 10:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2014)

It's on the Shimmie: http://shimmie.katawa-shoujo.com/post/view/3312?search=hanako%20akira And I don't think it's just Akira hitting on Hanako - sure, Hanako's surprised, but look where her hands are. Can't see the full thing since I'm at work and the Shimmie is blocked by our server, but looking c...
by Trivun
Wed Feb 05, 2014 9:22 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2014)

You're doing a really good job portraying the story from Hanako's point of view. Keep up the good writing Thank you, I hope I can keep it up too :D Could this be... what I hoped for all along? YES! Oh sweet salty christ, I'm practically vibrating in place in anticipation of the next chapter. Your w...
by Trivun
Tue Feb 04, 2014 1:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2013)

I'm just curious how far those "certain events" went. ;P (I'm of the opinion that Hanako may have even had her first time with Miki. She seemed oddly confident about the whole "all of me" thing working, which tells me that it worked before, or she got the idea from Miki.) That does clash in a major...
by Trivun
Tue Feb 04, 2014 10:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2013)

To his credit, he quickly stops staring and turns back to the girl he's currently talking to, who I already recognise as Miki Miura. I know her a little from... well, let's just say certain events some time ago. It's embarrassing to feel her eyes on the back of my head, though I know from previous ...
by Trivun
Tue Feb 04, 2014 9:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/02/2013)

Apologies to all that this is shorter than I hoped for. I read ahead to make sure I was following the game properly and realised too late that the next chapter is actually shorter than I remembered, cutting off at a certain point. Hence a slightly shorter chapter. I could have made this one longer ...
by Trivun
Wed Jan 29, 2014 9:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 86989

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 24/12/2013)

Oh god, I approve of this so much. I made an account just to say thank you for this fantastic side of the story. Thanks for the support, and I'm actually pretty proud that I was the specific cause of someone creating an account on here :). Makes me feel a bit like Yahtzee Croshaw... (him being the ...