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by BlackRockHanako
Fri Aug 24, 2012 5:59 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Rin: Specters of an Atelier
Replies: 20
Views: 2994

Re: Rin: Specters of an Atelier

BigDoktor wrote:In any case, are there any other sites that this community WOULDN'T look down upon? Like a more respectable fanfiction site...? I'd be grateful to know of any.

Uh...this forum?
by BlackRockHanako
Wed Jun 13, 2012 4:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lilly "Bittersweet" neutral end continuation
Replies: 26
Views: 4045

Re: Lilly "Bittersweet" neutral end continuation

griffon8 wrote:Why is Lilly back for Hisao if he wasn't honest with her? Hisao no longer deserves Lilly. He lost that with the first lie.

While she only neglected to mention that she was moving to live on the other side of the world, even if Hisao was honest with her.
by BlackRockHanako
Tue May 29, 2012 5:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Haiku for each girl!
Replies: 50
Views: 4944

Re: A Haiku for each girl!

Gotta go real fast Even if I don't have legs Really Really fast One too many syllables on the first line. Replace 'Gotta' with 'Must'? Gott (1) -a (2) go (3) real (4) fast (5) Tezuka's art shines, If only she would accept the help I offer. Nomiya Fair enough, I'd pronounce it ree-uhl , but a check ...
by BlackRockHanako
Tue May 29, 2012 3:03 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Haiku for each girl!
Replies: 50
Views: 4944

Re: A Haiku for each girl!

I like this! While not really a girl, I couldn't resist: High School Science Class Most of them are Ignorants Just Hisao gets it Yeah, I was never good at poetry. One too many syllables on the last line. Replacing 'Hisao' with 'Nakai' works (Unless I can't pronounce Nakai right, you never know). Got...
by BlackRockHanako
Sun May 27, 2012 3:14 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Emotional Night.. (Hanako and Hisao)
Replies: 19
Views: 3292

Re: An Emotional Night.. (Hanako and Hisao)

I was afraid of that. But really its my first try and I knew it was going to be far from perfect. If I am going to get comments though, I would really like to get some constructive criticism and points on what I could have done differently. I think the main thing in terms of your writing is that di...
by BlackRockHanako
Sat May 26, 2012 11:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: -
Replies: 25
Views: 3376

Re: Mirror, Mirror [Hanako] [Updated 5/26]

random wrote:you keep your fat, ugly lezbo away from hanako
But Hanako x Misha is OTP
by BlackRockHanako
Fri May 25, 2012 2:37 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: -
Replies: 25
Views: 3376

Re: Mirror, Mirror [Hanako]

I remember reading a story exactly like this a while ago, by CrossRook I think.
by BlackRockHanako
Tue May 22, 2012 5:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Facing my Pains
Replies: 115
Views: 15172

Re: Facing my Pains

Double spacing pleeeeeease.
by BlackRockHanako
Mon May 21, 2012 5:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20
Replies: 54
Views: 9417

Re: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20

I don't really have answers to the first two, so yeah, let's go for 'Suspension of Disbelief' I think Treading Water is probably my favourite thing in here too, so i'm glad you like it! Uh, what exactly do you want more of? Hanako and Hisao's blossoming friendship in Emi's route? And about Rin's Itc...
by BlackRockHanako
Sun May 20, 2012 4:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20
Replies: 54
Views: 9417

Re: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20

Perhaps a missed opportunity to use an old metaphor for orgasm as "clouds and rain"? Seems particularly appropriate for Rin for the use of rain and clouds as symbols throughout her route... as well as her soaking her pillow in such a fashion. Hrm, I didn't think of that. I thought 'clouds and rain'...
by BlackRockHanako
Sun May 20, 2012 3:20 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20
Replies: 54
Views: 9417

Re: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20

Rin's Itch -------------------------- My paintbrush dangles between my two favourite toes, ready to paint the blank canvas in front of me. Ready to paint…something anyway. I can’t remember what anymore. It’s this itch that I’m feeling, impossible to paint with it. Itch. Itch. Itch. Itch. It’s takin...
by BlackRockHanako
Fri May 18, 2012 3:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
Replies: 156
Views: 40425

Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)

Hoitash wrote:It looks to be just a temp ban, though, so there's hope writing-wise.
It's permanent. You can find his writing in other places with a tiny bit of effort. (But it's not allowed to be posted here.)
by BlackRockHanako
Fri May 18, 2012 3:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mendācium (Hanako) - Version 1.1.1
Replies: 292
Views: 42992

Re: Mendācium (Hanako) - Version 1.1

>Having fun

That's just silly, and not at all healthy. Shame on you.
by BlackRockHanako
Fri May 18, 2012 2:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
Replies: 156
Views: 40425

Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)

lolawesome wrote:Aw man, why'd you end it right at the part I want to read more of? Face_Sad
Because he got banned, mainly.
by BlackRockHanako
Wed May 16, 2012 10:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hopeless (Misha-Hisao-Shizune Bad Ending)
Replies: 6
Views: 2289

Re: Hopeless (Misha-Hisao-Shizune Bad Ending)

A well as getting a proof reader for this and any future work you do, you should ditch the script format for dialogue too.