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I am seriously loving this story. I just came back to this forum the other day after botching my attempt to write a story a few months ago, so it's awesome to see great new stories like this one out and about. Can't wait for the next update.

So, yeah, that whole one week thing didn't exactly pan out. Sorry about that. I just need to fix a couple of things about this story, a few minor rewrites, etc. After that, we'll be good to go. The main thing I'm changing is the focus of the story. Hopefully after these changes the whole thing will ...

Now for the educational post! As far as character names go, I had Hitomi, Time Warp Tan, and Hachisame to work with. Tan isn't a name but I still wanted to her to be "Time Warp Tan," so Time Warp became her nickname and I decided to use Tana as her first name. Now if my google searches di...

Wow, just wow. A chance meeting between two broken people who should be a bit happier to see each other that goes nowhere. This is really sad, but I thought the characterization was perfect, and Hanako acts exactly like I figured she would after being on her own for a while.

Good work man.

Sorry about the wait guys, but school has been keeping me down, both on the high school level and worrying about college. Good news however: I just graduated high school yesterday! So now I have a lot more time at my disposal. I also just went back through Emi's path, which was good because it had a...

Now that the whole title business is concluded, I gotta say I like this story. The use of an inanimate object as the narrator and in the way you've done it is really intriguing. Certainly it's something I've never seen before, at least in relation to KS and more specifically Hanako. Keep up the good...

Instead of being a doucher like most of the people in the thread, I'll simply say that the story needs a title and offer a couple suggestions; Perhaps you should call it simply, 'Let's Play'. Or perhaps, 'View From The Shelf'? Maybe 'Teddy Bears and Bishops'? I like that last one the most. These ar...

There's a difference between a boring title and a thematic one. In your quest to avoid a boring title, you went to simple and ironically ended up making a more boring title. Titles are difficult. You want to entice the reader to bring them in, and yes, you don't wanna just slap some title on there t...

It is a song reference, but not to that one. The song it is from and the meaning as it relates to the story will come later. Aw, I had my hopes up. After all, the song I was talking about is my favourite song of all time. Rage Against the Machine is amazing, but it's interesting that you would thin...

It is a song reference, but not to that one. The song it is from and the meaning as it relates to the story will come later.

Act 1: Shiver A New Beginning Silence fills the hallway. The gun-smoke slowly dissipates, clearing the haze but leaving behind the bittersweet smell of sulfur. I exhale for the first time in what feels like ages. I eject the empty clip from my USP 9 pistol, sliding in a new one with a resonant and ...

Ok, now I'm really intrigued by this story, and I'm really excited to where this story is gonna go. 10/10 Doomish

Doomish never fails to please. Excellent as always, and the picture at the end really helped me visualize everything. Considering the huge curtain of hair that she had before, the new haircut is a welcome change. I really enjoyed this one, and, while your gory stuff is amazing too, it's nice to see ...

It should also be spelled "Memoir", not "memoar", but other than that and the somewhat hard-to-understand English, it's pretty good, and the gist of it comes across nicely. Keep up the good work!

You know, I kind of hope the OC also befriends whoever Hisao ends up with. Mostly because I've always wanted to see someone give him the "You break her heart, I break your legs." speech. Haha, that's actually really clever. I was planning to have the story go through Hisao's arrival as we...