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by WorldlyWiseman
Thu Aug 23, 2018 10:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

Come to think of it, having Misha remember the fight during the conversation that follows might be an simpler fix to make. She dismisses the idea of Hanako being turned away from Lilly far too easily considering what just happened. Having one of them openly notice that Hanako is behaving differently...
by WorldlyWiseman
Thu Aug 23, 2018 8:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180820 Blue Haired Girls)

This is cute! I agree that it could have gone a bit longer and having two punchlines is weird. Since the table plan was Shiz's idea, Suzu could do something to help get the power outage situation under control, just in time for the pizza truck to arrive. The interaction feels just right, though.
by WorldlyWiseman
Wed Aug 22, 2018 10:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

My bad! In the dorm hallway, Misha got on Lilly's nerves right away with the tea comment, and then Hanako insisted that Misha be brought along despite Lilly's displeasure. Which seems a bit dense for her to be honest, with how grave Lilly sounds, I think she's just not wanting to be bossed around by...
by WorldlyWiseman
Wed Aug 22, 2018 4:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

Misha is noticing a shift in the tone of conversation, related to Hananko's feelings about her birthday, that we as the audience aren't getting any info on. The portion of the conversation about the 'special tea blend' is lacking any indication that Hanako is uncomfortable so the problem seemed reso...
by WorldlyWiseman
Fri Aug 17, 2018 12:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180806 Oddball's Triple Decker)

Life is strange for lots of folks. Your dedication to this is admirable, Oddball, don't beat yourself up! emmjay One-shots Fire and Ashes and Smoke should've been combined and had the scenario in Smoke be structured differently but they were written years apart so eh. Suzu kinda wanders a bit and I ...
by WorldlyWiseman
Thu Aug 16, 2018 12:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's New Hat
Replies: 9
Views: 1318

Re: Hanako's New Hat

sloth4 wrote:
Tue Aug 14, 2018 1:38 pm
What is this, exactly? I couldn't find anything when I searched online.
There's a link to crud's blog right below the picture above. I am assuming that the picture is related.
by WorldlyWiseman
Mon Aug 13, 2018 10:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's New Hat
Replies: 9
Views: 1318

Re: Hanako's New Hat

Neat! This builds up to its climax at a good pace and the narrator's discomfort with the hat adds some dark comedy. The introduction of the snake hat feels more absurd than shocking or frightening. I think it's a combination of the narrator being really specific about the books Hanako is reading, as...
by WorldlyWiseman
Sat Aug 11, 2018 12:31 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

Copy of Copy of Untitled Document (2).docx

Can't wait to find out who gifted a laptop to Hanako. Hand-me-down from an orphanage IT upgrade?
by WorldlyWiseman
Sat Aug 04, 2018 11:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

I really don't know how you manage all this quality output.
Hanako Fancopter wrote:
Sun Jul 29, 2018 8:53 pm
LOL. My first h-scene/sex scene that I've ever written. Hope it was serviceable!
I bet you say that to all the forums.
by WorldlyWiseman
Sat Jul 14, 2018 7:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

That was very deftly handled, and you're giving Shizune way more humanity than a lot of fics bother with. I'm a fan. A Hanako Fancopter fancopter, hovering over this thread.
by WorldlyWiseman
Fri Jul 06, 2018 9:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180702 Phantom Pains)

Made it to chapter seven and I don't think I'm going to finish based on the other comments. As a returning fan, I have barely any sense of who Saki is, honestly I was just annoyed that the author immediately dismantled every possible source of conflict as it arose and by the sound of things contrive...
by WorldlyWiseman
Mon Jul 02, 2018 12:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako; Complete)
Replies: 138
Views: 15835

Re: An Unusual Friendship (Misha x Hanako)

I'm glad I caught up with this. You're making good use of existing canon and it's really helping you sell this pairing.
by WorldlyWiseman
Sun Jun 24, 2018 11:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180625 Double Header)

Lost Opportunities is cool and good. I kinda lost track of Nurse's and Meiko's positions relative to one another at certain points, but whatevs. Slick Nurse, afraid of commitment. Mirrors of the Sun is Aura doing Aura. Understated but effective, and then scrambling a bit to find a way to work in the...
by WorldlyWiseman
Tue Jun 05, 2018 9:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180528 'The Ties That Bind')

Man, Shizune is a biiiitch in her parts! But it's certainly one viable direction for the character, so I don't disapprove. Always good for the story to have a kind of villain. That's the thing, though, she's not presenting enough risk to be the villain in her own right. The blackmail angle is tosse...
by WorldlyWiseman
Wed May 30, 2018 8:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191021 Inkyukasu—A Horror Fic)
Replies: 1804
Views: 249941

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20180528 'The Ties That Bind')

Shizune and Misha get caught up in this for basically no reason. Shiz's only motive is finding out what's going on, and Misha turns on the only friend we know she has without even trying to appeal to her. There could have been at least some confrontation here but there isn't. It feels psychotic and ...