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Edit: I added chapter 3, For the most part, I introduced the USSR Antagonist, and I added how Life was for Lilly and tried to make it seem like she misses Hisao.
I also began Hisao's experience in Boot Camp to lengthen the chapter.

I always pronounced it HIS-OW because i watched a Lets play of mega man battle network 3, and the Character, who's name is spelled chisao, was pronounced CHIS-OW by the player.

The problem with that is - would the Scots even want someone from a country they are at war with fighting for them? Let alone someone with a heart condition that wouldn't let him survive boot camp... Its been 15 years since we left off at KS, The Heart Problem is pretty much fixed, its been lowered...

i wont be rude but i think it should be fine to give you a fair critic as a fellow writer :) your story is interesting and well thought out, but it was too rushed, the vocab isnt very wide spread and theres not enough dialog. Maybe making the chapter a little longer, like involving their kids a lit...

Alexbond45, it sounds like you're getting a bit blue, perhaps a bit depressed even, so that worries me a bit. Lack of appetite is one of the symptoms of clinical depression. Whether something is interesting or boring depends mostly on your appreciation of it, and much less on the thing itself. So y...

Lucas, I want to give you my favorite quote when it comes to being down Never give up, Never surrender. Sure, its a bit of a military thing, but always keep it close, its the kind of phrase that gets you through things, it helps me, and it might help you too. Anyway, IMO I really think your biggest ...

Hisao is an ass with no crowning moments; that's about it. Things like selfishness and Irrationally taking your anger out on others, etc. are all fine, but they need something GOOD to balance it, and Hisao lacks this. At least he is not a Wesley Crusher (IE: Perfect with no flaws except 1-He is per...

I think it does.

Anyway, you need to find the right person, Life is a battlefield, don't let it beat you with a blitzkreig.
I really hope it shapes up for you.

I think this would be my first time ever saying this all. I have been bullied throughout much of my school life. Because of how I look, because of how I dress. Things I could've changed, but I was me. During elementary and middle school, I was all but alone. I had at most, 2 friends, neither really...

I was stuck in the same rut, being an underclassmen in high school, i knew this rut would repeat. Here is an Idea Band (main reason i go) Some class Some Class and lunch my worse classes are 4th period last period is Geography, very laid back We have a block schedule, so it changes, in the lunch per...

For some damned reason, this game has forced me to question things i used to like. Although the things i built stability over (I am a Christian and I love Music, please do not try to change my mind on this) I start questioning the more simple things, or what reason do I go to school other than band?...

The part that really got me with Lilly's ending was when she was saying goodbye to Hanako at the school gates. Although Hanako had gained a certain degree of independence by this point in the story Lilly was her only true friend and the person she loved most in the entire world. Watching them say g...

I have decided to try and redo the story to more realistic standards, This includes taking law into hand, and keeping realistic proportions. This has taken some time to work out those damned legal problems, let me tell you I am no expert on the Legal System, but I try. Same characters still apply Th...

I am going through a similar experience in the Lilly Ending, i was really sad at the end, i even shed a few tears (I am very hard to be moved from a story, for the most part, i can sit through something with no emotion, though, there have been exeptions) Unfortunatly, it is spring break, so im suffe...

It is not implied you will receive prosthetic limbs upon losing your legs, you would have to spend your own money to get them, this is why i chose blindness, I really dont want to not have any parts missing anyway. Anyway, internet says it costs several thousand US Dollars for the limbs, and you hav...