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by Homeless
Thu Jul 26, 2012 9:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

It's coming people, I'm half way through the next chapter.

(New job and crazy hours don't help much)
by Homeless
Sat Jun 16, 2012 10:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tips for fanfiction writers (that means YOU)
Replies: 169
Views: 59395

Re: Tips for fanfiction writers (that means YOU)

I actually was looking at this a while ago, but when I went back to get the template it was gone, (they are moving their forms around or some such) I'd just like the perimeters the questions ask, is all. Sorry for the late reply. Link on new forums is here. http://somnovastudios.org/forum/viewtopic...
by Homeless
Mon Jun 11, 2012 10:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies

Nothing like that. Part of my job for the past 7 years has been to watch people and to figure out behavior. Give me 3-6 months and I can tell you anything you want to know about your behaviors, and most likely many things you didn't want to know. I watch people, thats what I'm good at. Don't ask me...
by Homeless
Sun May 20, 2012 1:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

Just finished catching up and I'm loving your portrayal of Rin so far. I have a question though: Hisao is talking about getting an apartment before going to Uni. This story is set during the summer holidays right? Rin and Hisao don't graduate until spring so is Hisao being pre-emptive? Surely they ...
by Homeless
Thu May 10, 2012 7:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies

Another great fic. How do you manage to get the "Rin" into the parts where she's just thinking to herself? I always had trouble seeing where her thoughts came from or where they would/could go. Do you put yourself into some kind of exotic Zen meditation or something else? ;) Nothing like that. Part...
by Homeless
Fri Apr 27, 2012 11:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

Oh sure, but that's dealing her motivations, not the way those motivations lead to action. Regardless the form the encounter took was clearly of the 'no limbs that end in fingers allowed' variety and given the trouble he's having sticking to those ground rules additional restraint might be needed. ...
by Homeless
Fri Apr 27, 2012 9:29 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

nemz wrote:Was there some other reason she kept telling him this was sex by soccer rules?
Retaining some kind of assemblance of control over things? Or maybe it was her way of saying "thanks,"?
by Homeless
Wed Apr 25, 2012 11:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

nemz wrote:I'm almost suprised she didn't find something to tie his hands behind his back with. Oh well, cuteness abounds but it's mixed with nervous trepidation for what the nurse might have to say.

LMAO, mmm, tying his hands up eh? Interesting idea.
by Homeless
Wed Apr 25, 2012 10:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

Here's the next chapter enjoy (with thanks to CommnderShepard) Unease. The car ride back to Yamaku was filled with small talk between my father, mother and myself, with Rin only breaking her silence every so often. We talked about my future and where it would lead me. It was interesting, I never tho...
by Homeless
Mon Apr 09, 2012 12:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Lamb and The Fox
Replies: 83
Views: 18275

Re: The Lamb and The Fox

Excellent fic. Made me feel a lot better about Rin's neutral ending. One thing though, perhaps I'm an idiot but I still don't understand what "You can see the elephant in the boa" means. Can you please spell it out for me? It's in reference to a book called The Little Prince. One of the pieces of a...
by Homeless
Sat Apr 07, 2012 5:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcome
Replies: 70
Views: 16580

Re: Butterflies (Was Rinicisms) (Erotic bits)Feedback welcom

The last chapters are really good. You have made impressive progress in balancing Rinisms, descriptions, and dialog. But you really need to work on your times. You still mix present and past, and with such a good story, it becomes very jarring to stumble on a past tense in the middle of a present t...
by Homeless
Sat Apr 07, 2012 7:50 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Fanart roundup
Replies: 94
Views: 23587

Re: Fanart roundup

My god, there are so many D'aawwws to be had.
by Homeless
Fri Apr 06, 2012 12:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A guy's luck (TF2 Crossover)
Replies: 25
Views: 4179

Re: A guy's luck (Self-Insertion/TF2 Crossover)

Couldn't read it. Tried a few times, but just couldn't do it. Why not? It seems okay to me. Okay, lets put it to you this way, You have a story, it's a good story, so you make a game about it. It's a feel good kinda story. Then someone else has a story, it's a blow shit up story. That's cool right?...
by Homeless
Thu Apr 05, 2012 5:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Blood Bank (aka "Feels for Jigoro") - Updated 4/5
Replies: 5
Views: 1333

Re: Blood Bank (aka "Feels for Jigoro") - Updated 4/5

This is good, I like where it could go.