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by Oddball
Tue Sep 15, 2020 4:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Evolution Fuel - Rika Pseudo Route
Replies: 4
Views: 509

Re: Evolution Fuel - Rika Pseudo Route

First post and you're starting off with a pseudo route. You're not one for easing in slowly, are you?

Right now, there's not a whole lot to comment on, but some of your wording seems a bit windy and your sentences tend to run on a bit. You might want to watch that.

Anyway, Good luck to you.
by Oddball
Fri Sep 11, 2020 12:09 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)
Replies: 1874
Views: 304321

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

A little too flowery for me, and I wasn't aware of the super-rich Lilly era, but there were elements that were cute enough to still make it an enjoyable read. Considering what we know of Lilly know, the idea that at one time they considered making Lilly half African and her family owned a diamond m...
by Oddball
Sun Sep 06, 2020 8:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)
Replies: 1874
Views: 304321

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Another Omake Scene)

https://i.imgur.com/8FRtIUN.png Another omake scene from yours truly by Penguinmayhem. Once again we take a step back to before the game actually came out. Way before in this case. We're talking about year one of development here. Most of the comments are even from the devs (sadly whatever image De...
by Oddball
Sat Sep 05, 2020 1:37 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Question About Hanako's Route
Replies: 6
Views: 293

Re: Question About Hanako's Route

One of the interesting things about examining Hanako's route is that the character herself has a habit of over examining things. If you go in looking at the tiny details and over thinking them, odds are it's something she's over thought herself. They've went to the Shanghai for tea, spent time playi...
by Oddball
Wed Aug 26, 2020 1:41 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: If I Do: A sappy, cathartic epilogue to the neutral ending of Rin's route.
Replies: 5
Views: 245

Re: If I Do: A sappy, cathartic epilogue to the neutral ending of Rin's route.

I'll probably end up following this up with some better planned works about Rin in the decade previous to this story. Any follow up to this would probably be much higher quality. I hope so, at least. Reading and writing fanfiction is foreign to me, and I feel it requires a style of thinking that I ...
by Oddball
Wed Aug 26, 2020 12:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: If I Do: A sappy, cathartic epilogue to the neutral ending of Rin's route.
Replies: 5
Views: 245

Re: If I Do: A sappy, cathartic epilogue to the neutral ending of Rin's route.

This is a bit hard to get into for me. For starters, Rin doesn't feel much like Rin at all. It doesn't feel so much like she's changed as it does that you just have a hard time writing the character. I can't really blame you there though, she is a hard one to get your head around and you did make a ...
by Oddball
Wed Aug 26, 2020 12:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Iron Saki
Replies: 3
Views: 257

Re: Iron Saki

I have nothing to say about this other than "... the hell?".

Not even "What the hell?" because that implies a question that somebody might try to explain. Just "...the hell?"
by Oddball
Tue Aug 25, 2020 10:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1559
Views: 344873

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]

Good grief! I didn’t realize I was writing an essay, here. Sorry folks. I guess I got carried away. Once again, my hat is off to Dewelar for writing this excellent story, in addition to Leaty, Crimson Harmony, and all of the folks who contributed their talents and ideas towards the story! There is ...
by Oddball
Sat Aug 22, 2020 6:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)
Replies: 1874
Views: 304321

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)

Man that guy sure had something cool planned for his eye socket. He even told himself he had plans for his eye socket a few weeks after initially telling the doctor not to get him a glass eye because he had plans for the eye socket, so it must have been cool. Can't wait to find out what cool things...
by Oddball
Sat Aug 22, 2020 6:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)
Replies: 1874
Views: 304321

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Zade Wither)

That time again! https://i.imgur.com/8FRtIUN.png Zade Wither by AlphaWarMeister. Ah, Zade Wither. A name that feels like it belongs in a 80s action movie set in some horrible future, or maybe an early 90s anime. How can you not love a story with a guy named Zade Wither? What is his disability you ma...
by Oddball
Sat Aug 22, 2020 6:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Of Secrets and Scandals (an OC pseudo-pseudo-route)
Replies: 10
Views: 3299

Re: Of Secrets and Scandals (an OC pseudo-pseudo-route)

This had an interesting start. You don't normally see Takashi as one of the main characters either. It's a shame it never went anywhere.
by Oddball
Thu Aug 20, 2020 4:23 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Why I love Shizune and her route -- an essay
Replies: 3
Views: 846

Re: Why I love Shizune and her route -- an essay

Shizune was my least favorite of the routes, but I do think her ending is the best one to leave the game on. It wasn't the last one I played, but it does have a nice finality to it. It's never rubbed in your face quite how bad Shizune's situation is. Sure, her father's a dreadful person, but she's n...
by Oddball
Tue Aug 18, 2020 11:45 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Running Away To You (A Post Lilly-Neutral Story) (Updated 15/8/20)
Replies: 9
Views: 1432

Re: Running Away To You (A Post Lilly-Neutral Story) (Updated 15/8/20)

Pretty good so far. Usually Akira/Hisao doesn't work at all, but by moving them ahead some years, I think the age difference is less of a factor than the stories that try to hook them up while in Yamaku. I was wondering why Lilly was never mentioned, not even in passing, up until you're reveal that ...
by Oddball
Mon Aug 17, 2020 3:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Room
Replies: 55
Views: 13518

Re: Golden Room

There were certainly some wild ideas there.

It's a shame we'll never get to see them written out, but I can understand how a project can grow beyond your ability to do it justice. That's without even getting into how time can change your views on things.
by Oddball
Wed Aug 12, 2020 12:41 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)
Replies: 44
Views: 2525

Re: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)

A student named Hitomi in Lilly's class, huh? For some reason I was kind of expecting somebody different. :wink: "Plenty is demanded of the Student Council, and we have many responsibilities over a large portion of the student body's activities, She says right after she tell a student that they won'...