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by Oddball
Wed Oct 16, 2019 11:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Arrival [updated 10-31-18]
Replies: 21
Views: 2015

Re: Arrival [updated 10-31-18]

This was a wonderful little story. I love stories where characters arrive and don't immediatly just go to class. You do a great job handling Hanako here, making her so withdrawn that she's wiling to starve herself rather than incovinecne anyone is a a very nice touch. Personally, I had always though...
by Oddball
Wed Oct 09, 2019 11:04 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Looking for Shizune Cosplayer
Replies: 4
Views: 244

Re: Looking for Shizune Cosplayer

Good job
by Oddball
Sun Oct 06, 2019 12:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Unforeseen Consequences, Katawa Shoujo Forums Edition
Replies: 50
Views: 3429

Re: Unforeseen Consequences, Katawa Shoujo Forums Edition

This is certainly better than your first attempt at the story. However while Angus is now a far more less cliche character, he also tends to lack a lot of personality. The fact that he's able to walk around, talk, and hang out with the main cast with no real problems makes him feel less like a forei...
by Oddball
Thu Oct 03, 2019 2:14 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191007 A reply to Iwanako)
Replies: 1801
Views: 247514

Re: Yamaku Book Club (works from Cpl Crud)

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png I really wanted to do an update for the Bookclub today, but over the past few days I've read a ton of stories and I'm a bit read-out. All the stories I read were new ones too, so I don't want to use them here. Instead, we'll read ... this. A reply to Iwanako by sam70...
by Oddball
Thu Oct 03, 2019 10:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Crafty's One-Shots (Sep 21st, 2019: Someone)
Replies: 71
Views: 5498

Re: Crafty's One-Shots (Sep 21st, 2019: Someone)

One early thing that bothers me in the story is how you make it seem like Emi has locked herself away for quite sometime, but it feels like if she did that, somebody would have checked on her before now. You do have Miki come after her, but the timing and description feels somewhat off. Just by sayi...
by Oddball
Tue Oct 01, 2019 10:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miracles,Kilts and Lilys
Replies: 2
Views: 169

Re: Miracles,Kilts and Lilys

The very first line you use “u” instead of “you”. Next line … Lilly was not a big fan of this idea. She’s now 18 years alive You switched tenses on me. You actually switch tenses quite a bit thoughout the story. Might want to work on that. Also... “eighteen years alive?” I know what you mean, but th...
by Oddball
Tue Sep 24, 2019 4:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Aro's Story Thread.
Replies: 10
Views: 500

Re: Aro's Story Thread.

There's nothing wrong with Routine, but there's nothing really right with it either. It just feels... well... routine. Nothing there makes it stand out.
by Oddball
Sat Sep 21, 2019 9:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Spectral Letters and Other Stories [08/28/2019]
Replies: 61
Views: 4310

Re: The Kintsugi Club and Other Stories [08/28/2019]

Dedications to other authors and none of them are me. You lost major points there. For that and for having a story who's title I don't know how to pronounce. Man, you're off to a bad start before I even get to the story. :evil: Akio is a rather interesting character. There's a lot of build up to how...
by Oddball
Fri Sep 13, 2019 2:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191007 A reply to Iwanako)
Replies: 1801
Views: 247514

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Yields Six Servings)

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png You know what time it is! It's cooking Club time!... I mean book club. Actually, you know what? It's both today. Yields Six Servings by themocaw. This story is about Rin, doing a perfectly normal thing. She's cooking. The interesting part is how Rin goes about it and...
by Oddball
Tue Sep 03, 2019 12:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Reunions (S9 Submission) (Updated 2/4/19)
Replies: 11
Views: 1134

Re: Reunions (S9 Submission) (Updated 2/4/19)

Interesting idea, although Rin feels a bit too normal. I understand how people can change over the years, but there doesn't seem to be too much left of the way she used to act to balance it out and make it feel like her.
by Oddball
Sat Aug 31, 2019 11:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1266

Re: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)

It's a cute story so far. Ikuno and her family are quite adorable. Hisao comes off as a bit too clueless at times and sometimes seems to be the punching bag of everybody and you do dwell a bit too much on the sweater vest thing. I have no idea why everyone feels the need to bring that up. You're als...
by Oddball
Wed Aug 28, 2019 10:02 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Shiina 3
Replies: 2
Views: 536

Re: Shiina 3

Interesting origin of Misha's nickname and hairstyle. I also like the idea of Misha and Shizune trying to attend a birthday party for Hanako and the extra tension that caused, even if it doesn't really fit well with canon. The nickname Hanako-chan feels overly long and clumsy though. I'm usually aga...
by Oddball
Mon Aug 26, 2019 3:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191007 A reply to Iwanako)
Replies: 1801
Views: 247514

Re: Yamaku Book Club (works from Cpl Crud)

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png We're going to do something a little bit different this time. We're going to read multiple stories. (it's okay. They're short). On top of that, we're going off forum for them. And for the icing on the cake, we're going to look at something from our of our dear devs. ...
by Oddball
Wed Aug 21, 2019 10:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Da Capo
Replies: 7
Views: 367

Re: Da Capo

Very interesting work.

The idea of starting this story after it's been going on for a while is a nice touch. It skips right off the awkward parts about her figuring out what's going on and gets right to the meat of the story.
by Oddball
Wed Aug 14, 2019 11:36 am
Forum: Fan Works
Topic: Blooper Reel
Replies: 1298
Views: 256830

Re: Blooper Reel

Mirage_GSM wrote:
Wed Aug 14, 2019 10:47 am
Is "masterbating" some weird hybrid between "masturbating" and "masterbaiting"? 8)
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Yes.


That's my answer and I'm sticking to it.