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I'm going to have to agree with DaGarver. 'Said' is a very invisible word. It's not as easy to overuse as you might think. For speech tags, things like 'said' or 'asked' can be reused quite a bit before they start to draw too much attention, while words like "bellowed" or "balked"...

Haven't had time to read this yet (totes excited to get on that!), but from Sciz's comment, I think that the absence of a "Next" link on his normal navigation section implies that that was the last chapter, or if not THE last chapter, at least a "potential end". I think he's impl...

Catgirl Kleptocracy's Bucket List: Read 46 pages of chapters and comments for a good story. Check. Whew, that was a long read, but well worth the time put into taking in (about tied with ProfAllister). Out of curiosity, do you have a current word count on the story? Anyway, you've done a great job w...

Thanks for the comments on the writing. I wanted to try something a bit different from my usual style, so I'm glad at least that part seems to be working. I picked Suzu for a couple of reasons. I figured just about any of the "unwritten in canon" characters could work, since no personality...

IV I’m sitting in my desk chair sometime between downing my Xyrem and my Prozac, and the clock reads 11:45. It’s late, but I’m not tired. A busy day is like a series of adrenaline shots fired one after another. The rush only lasts a moment, but bolting from one sell to another is a drug trip in its...

A/N: Howdy. I figured it'd be a lot of fun to try writing in different styles and voices, so I decided I'm going to throw out a one-shot every so often between sections of my multi-chapter. They'll all use different characters, and try to explore different aspects of life at Yamaku. None of them wi...

Sort of. First person and Third Limited can at a glance look the same, but they do work and read very differently. You're fine on your perspective right now, but what Mirage brought up still applies regarding your perspective. To use your Star Wars example, the technology isn't described partly beca...

As long as you are sticking with limited pov, and keep a very close distance to the character, you do not have to distinguish thoughts from the rest of the text. The third person grammar it uses as opposed to first person is 'he/she' instead of 'I'. Other than that, they can (at a glance) be nearly ...

It's a short bit, and not the whole first chapter, but from what you've shown us of it the writing itself looks solid. You don't spend an unreasonable amount of time focusing on either action or insight while sacrificing the other. We get just the right amount of each, which was what struck me the m...

Asking for advice. I have a lot of respect for you for asking that question. Partly because it's a difficult question to grapple, but mostly because, more than that, it's an even more difficult question to ask. Unfortunately, there's only one answer to it: Man up and write anyway. This isn't just a...

Let me just say, that your Miki is my favourite Miki. Oh, and having a few male supporting characters other than Kenji doesn't hurt the story one bit! Thanks, I'm glad you like her character! The guys in the class need love too. They won't be the primary focus of the story, but the game was pretty ...

There is no right or wrong way to write fiction--unless there is. If your goal here is to write what you want so that you get individual enjoyment out of the act of writing, then you're doing just fine with what you're doing. Good on ya. If your goal is to write a story that is going to communicate ...

Nice man! Three cheers for Wayne County. A lot of metro-Detroit is really nice. I'm actually right on the southwest border of Oakland County right now out in RO. The ambulance services are strained in the city, but you still have to have love for the D. Even when we get swept. My question then is if...

I can't comment about the ambulance situation in Japan, but I know that here in Detroit--a city in a modern state--the ambulance response times are obscene, if an ambulance shows up at all. There are news reports of people having to wait for up to (and possibly more than) half an hour for an ambulan...

Two months isn't too bad, right? ----------------- Previous Chapter Polygraph Taro's left arm was paralyzed, but that didn't keep him from being the best cook in class. He always ate the school lunch, of course, but in his words the cafeteria's handout wasn't “hardy enough to pass for a midday snack...