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by Andere
Mon Jul 22, 2013 2:18 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 6/18]

Some kind of notation mainly used in the US. They haven't heard of ISO 8601 there. But with all their feet, gallons, miles and fahrenheits, they have worse things to be ashamed of ;-) But... The link you posted puts it as month/day! With a year in front, of course, but still month then day. Going "...
by Andere
Wed Mar 13, 2013 3:27 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 3/11]

Looking back at the chapter... Tetsuo has good intentions, but his personal hang-ups make him selfish and laser-focused on his goals. Akira, meanwhile... Well, it's incredibly questionable to bring a friend who is romantically interested in you on something that was originally meant as a date with y...
by Andere
Sat Mar 02, 2013 5:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 101242

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/1]

Regardless of her motivation, she'd probably consider offering assistance like that to be a really, really mean thing to do, in the same way you wouldn't walk up to an orphan and say, "Hey, want me to resurrect your dead parents?" (But less so, obviously -- I'm going to extremes to illustrate the po...
by Andere
Sat Mar 02, 2013 4:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 347
Views: 101242

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/1]

That last conversation felt very out-of-character for Emi. Emi's character arc in the VN is about her belief that ultimately, when push comes to shove, you can only ever rely on yourself. You can lean on others, but that just means you fall over when they leave. If she views relying on others as an ...
by Andere
Sat Feb 09, 2013 10:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)(complete)
Replies: 111
Views: 36591

Re: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)(complete)

Whoa hey, you did The Coin? I remember that one. I've enjoyed this one too. Thanks!
by Andere
Mon Jan 07, 2013 12:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 1/05]

I like the slight ambiguity near the end when they start laughing. It seems fairly clear that she's still tired of the arguing, but it also shows that there's some degree of real affection there. That's good to see. It's difficult to write any story where the love interest starts the story paired to...
by Andere
Mon Dec 31, 2012 5:14 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)(complete)
Replies: 111
Views: 36591

Re: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)

Randomly opened this today for no reason I can remember; I'm not really a big fan of Rin, so I wasn't expecting to enjoy it much. I did, though! Quite a bit. Read it through without a break. (And the opening set of qualifiers is an attempt at a compliment. I feel I should clarify that, because it's ...
by Andere
Fri Dec 21, 2012 12:54 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 12/16]

I like the changes to the Kenji scene. The ones I noticed, at least! Kenji's generally so odd that I like his moments of relative lucidity all the more.
by Andere
Mon Dec 17, 2012 7:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 12/16]

Hisao's gotten pretty far along if Akira's thinking of him as an alternative, even if she dismissed it pretty quickly. Good on him.

I'm looking forward to the dinner scene. It'll be the first time Hisao will be with Akira in a non one-on-one setting, so that should be interesting.
by Andere
Sat Dec 08, 2012 12:45 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
Replies: 581
Views: 229487

Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 12/6)

This is pretty excellent so far. I like your depiction of Hisao, Misha, and Shizune. The gradual uptick in his general mood throughout the chapters is handled very well. Misha's lurking issues with depression and Shizune are done well, and the hinting of her situation feel well-done. Shizune hasn't ...
by Andere
Tue Nov 20, 2012 10:43 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Pseudo-Route [Complete!]
Replies: 914
Views: 388688

Re: Akira Pseudo-Route [Updated as of 11/19]

The "crowbar" line about slayed me -- that's one of the best executions of a punch line I've seen in some time. Well done, sir, well done. I can't think of any unobtrusive way to portray time passing other than timestamps, but that would make it look more like a chat log than phone messages. I think...
by Andere
Sun Mar 04, 2012 2:21 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Am I the Only One That Didn't Like Lilly's Route?
Replies: 34
Views: 4331

Re: Am I the Only One That Didn't Like Lilly's Route?

Okay, let's back up a moment. There's a MAJOR issue here that's bothering me: People are not using "Mary Sue" correctly. This is in part because, as a derogatory term, "Mary Sue" is a term so broad and so flexible as to be largely useless for anything but name-calling. Sure, there are traits that ca...
by Andere
Fri Jan 06, 2012 7:11 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Lilly's Route
Replies: 518
Views: 90131

Re: Lilly's Route

I liked this path, all in all. The thing that stands out to me is that it's less like Hisao's Lilly route and more like Lilly's Hisao route; when it comes down to it, Hisao did all of the development and growth, while Lilly was comparatively a static character. She had her shit together, but Hisao d...
by Andere
Fri Jan 06, 2012 2:13 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizune's path
Replies: 410
Views: 66659

Re: Shizune's path

I feel as if I might have appreciated Shizune's route more if I had done it first. I started it immediately after finishing Rin's and Emi's routes, so I think I went in with the wrong mindset. After all of the experiences in those two routes, I expected something similar in Shizune's route, but her...
by Andere
Thu Jan 05, 2012 8:03 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizune's path
Replies: 410
Views: 66659

Re: Shizune's path

I'd argue that this is largely the point. Shizune is not a conflicted character. She's dealt with her disability years ago and she's (mostly) fine with the way things are for her. Of all the girls, she's the one that's most normal and has the fewest issues. Hisao's heart condition is irrelevant bec...