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by Mirage_GSM
Fri Mar 15, 2019 11:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Razor's One Shots & misc.
Replies: 3
Views: 126

Re: Razor's One Shots & misc.

So, one thing I always complain about in cases like this is when people heap several unrelated disabilities on the same person. Yes, it does happen in real life, but it always feels forced in fiction. Some other things are a bit hard to believe as well, e.g. why should her parents discuss the decisi...
by Mirage_GSM
Thu Mar 14, 2019 6:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yet another one-shot thread
Replies: 82
Views: 4583

Re: Yet another one-shot thread

Short and very to the point. I like it. Nice work!
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Mar 13, 2019 11:34 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Mattyd's Memes, Art, & Vids
Replies: 15
Views: 649

Re: Mattyd's Memes, Art, & Vids

You should probably remove that link and the reference to that project if you don't want to get banned...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Mar 08, 2019 12:52 pm
Forum: Fan Works
Topic: Katawa Shoujo for Rimworld
Replies: 12
Views: 1357

Re: Katawa Shoujo for Rimworld

Well, the save was gone, but I still have the preset with the characters.
I've used that for a couple more games in the meantime, but I didn't write diary for those.

That comic is good... but also sad...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Mar 06, 2019 5:31 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: (WIP - Updated 3/14/2019 TRIPLE POST) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - Hisao w/o Heart Attack]
Replies: 24
Views: 693

Re: (WIP - Updated 3/5/2019) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - Hisao w/o Heart Attack]

It's also kind of jarring to see that entire year of Hisao's life skimmed over in the space of 2 chapters paragraphs. I don't usually comment on stuff that didn't make it in the published version, but this is kind of funny, because in the original draft it was two sentences instead of two paragraph...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Mar 05, 2019 5:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20190318 Yamaku's Cheshire Cat)
Replies: 1755
Views: 215470

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190304 Irish Stout)

Well... I honestly can't remember having read this one before. I probably did, I just did a good job forgetting about it.
And now you have to drag it back into the light...

I generally don't like stories that are written solely for the shock effect, and even among those this is one of the worse ones.
by Mirage_GSM
Mon Mar 04, 2019 10:25 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Summertales
Replies: 5
Views: 283

Re: Summertales

I read up to the point where you started to use script format.
Quite a few grammar mistakes up to there but otherwise okay.
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Feb 26, 2019 12:17 pm
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Mattyd's Memes, Art, & Vids
Replies: 15
Views: 649

Re: Mattyd's Memes, Art, & Vids

Caption:
"No, my voice is just a bit hoarse today. By the way, you were paying for the strawberry parfait, right?"
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Feb 26, 2019 12:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20190318 Yamaku's Cheshire Cat)
Replies: 1755
Views: 215470

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190218 KS Pentameter)

The issue comes more in the choice of meter and rhyming scheme. In the English-speaking world, iambic pentameter is most directly related to Shakespeare. However, Shakespeare used blank verse in iambic pentameter because it most closely resembled the natural cadence of spoken English. Interesting, ...
by Mirage_GSM
Sun Feb 24, 2019 5:59 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 265751

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]

NelNinja wrote:
Sat Feb 23, 2019 5:33 pm
Onto Sisterhood for me, I guess, ...
Good luck and see you around Christmas :-)
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Feb 22, 2019 8:26 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: syfy.com tags KS as one of the five sexiest visual novels out there
Replies: 4
Views: 227

Re: syfy.com tags KS as one of the five sexiest visual novels out there

Well...
It might be flattering, if the author didn't try to sell each entry on that list on the value of its H-scenes - and if it didn't share the list with a "gem" like Grisaja... And Monster Girl Quest doesn't sound very promising either...
If my Heart had Wings might not be too bad, though.
by Mirage_GSM
Thu Feb 21, 2019 6:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 2/21)
Replies: 983
Views: 227489

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 2/21)

Not so much a triangle and more of a covalent bond - one electron leaves but another is already there to take its place.*

*I know that's not how covalence works, but close enough...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Feb 20, 2019 11:12 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 3-24-19)
Replies: 31
Views: 2266

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 2-19-19)

“One for Aiochan, one for Mirachan, one for Aiochan, one for Aiochan…” Her name is "Aoi". "Ai" would also be a suitable Japanese name if this is not supposed to be the sidecharacter from the VN, but "Aio" is not a name. [But perhaps a bit more awake and enthusiastic than Sensei Mutou?] If you want ...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Feb 19, 2019 12:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection
Replies: 52
Views: 4240

Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Added the latest submission by Scrathminus to the index. With this there should be four stories still missing - plus one or two that are still in progress. @ProfAllister are you going to give those four to other writers so Craftyatom, Vekter, BristerXD and PabloPabloPablo also get their prompts writ...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Feb 06, 2019 2:03 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (Latest 3/4/19)
Replies: 28
Views: 2786

Re: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (Latest 2/5/19)

Okay, after the first half I wondered why you put a lewd warning on a story like that. I couldn't see how you'd get around to a h-scene from that start... And it really did not work out all that well. That development would have needed a lot more build-up than this one-shot could possibly provide. T...