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by Mirage_GSM
Tue Apr 28, 2020 11:03 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

"Always be honest to and about yourself, but be careful never to trust others to also be honest to you."
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Apr 28, 2020 11:01 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)
Replies: 1874
Views: 303154

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200427 Two Flat Jokes)

Rookie Error sounds like the response to the challenge "How can I make Akira and Kenji fuck in 200 words or less"...

And I'm not sure I would even call the conclusion of "Oh Mah Drills" a joke. I'm not sure what else it might be either...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Apr 28, 2020 10:42 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Crafty's One-Shots (Jun 7th, 2020: Path of Least Resistance)
Replies: 111
Views: 13544

Re: Crafty's One-Shots (Apr 26th, 2020: The Slightest Nudge)

If it's tragedy you want (and I know you do)...
If he did, I promise that you’d be the first to know, Hanako.
Coming from Lilly this is a promise I certainly would not take at face value...
by Mirage_GSM
Sun Apr 26, 2020 8:56 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

Ultimately, I still think Hisao should've spoken up any of the times that he saw something was wrong. Remember when Hisao did speak up (after his talk with Akira and a ouple of days before the plane was scheduled to leave)? Akira had already put most ofher affairs in order, the plane tickets were b...
by Mirage_GSM
Sun Apr 26, 2020 5:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: *Ch32 Updated 11/9* Precious Friendships (Shizune BE, Sisterhood plot)
Replies: 42
Views: 3592

Re: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End epilogue) (Chapter 12, Updated 14 Apr 2020)

120? Really? Yuuko never struck me as very athletic... I think she once knocked off Kenji's parcel? And another time her glasses managed to fall off? Correct me if I'm wrong. You might want to double check how much 120° is... Personally I know exactly one person who could pull that off and she's ex...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Apr 22, 2020 6:08 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

He's resigned himself to losing her (I honestly can't fault him though. Would I think that I have any importance over her father and mother, as just the boyfriend?). Well, it's not just that... She also just showed him that she doesn't care for his feelings at all by first starting a relationship w...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Apr 22, 2020 6:01 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Please Don't Pass Me By (Lilly x OC)
Replies: 18
Views: 1765

Re: Please Don't Pass Me By (Lilly x OC)

Is she also lying to herself? Because she is the PoV narrator, and this doesn't sound like someone who is about to lie: Miss Satou’s attention is sharply on me, though it doesn’t feel oppressive and invasive as it often does; perhaps it’s because for once I’m offering the information to someone who ...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Apr 22, 2020 5:27 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

She's a hopeless romantic at heart, and the only thing she'd wanted was for Hisao to take an active part in their relationship, but he'd only just numbly went along, only once really asking if she was all right. Boy, does this not jive with my impression of Lilly. :lol: I don't think *any* of the g...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Apr 21, 2020 10:52 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

Typo. Fixed. I just read so many more LNs than VNs these days...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Apr 21, 2020 8:34 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Anyone know when Lilly found out?
Replies: 17
Views: 1568

Re: Anyone know when Lilly found out?

AfaIct there is only one line referring to that topic in the VN: "I heard later that it happened as you were running down the road after me, right?" That could mean 5 minutes later or a week later... But personally I never even considered the possibility that Lilly might have left Japan and come bac...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Apr 17, 2020 2:01 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Rin Epilogue: The Long Road (Updated 15/9/2020)
Replies: 34
Views: 5332

Re: Rin Epilogue: The Long Road (Updated 15/4/2020)

She could clearly see the knots on her jacket, but I suppose she wasn’t used to greeting someone without arms. Not that Japanese people greet each other with handshakes in the first place... Mom and Dad stared at Rin as they ate, refusing to turn away. And that makes me wonder what they expected wh...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Apr 17, 2020 1:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: *Ch32 Updated 11/9* Precious Friendships (Shizune BE, Sisterhood plot)
Replies: 42
Views: 3592

Re: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End epilogue) (Chapter 12, Updated 14 Apr 2020)

Oh boy, this is a long one... I'm going to comment as I read, so some comments might be redundant with what others have already written. When did everything start going wrong? First thought: "In a route going off Shizune's bad end this should be really f*ing obvious... :-) We really didn't need that...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Apr 17, 2020 11:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Some Shades of Blue
Replies: 3
Views: 549

Re: Some Shades of Blue

First of all, welcome to the forums! This has the potential to be a really beautiful story... I think the stongest part is the second half after meeting Emi, so I think the parts with Kenji and Misha detract from that a bit and could have been kept shorter or left out entirely. The biggest problem h...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Apr 17, 2020 10:47 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Raimen's Repository
Replies: 7
Views: 843

Re: Raimen's Repository

...and the ending with Jigoro was kinda cartoony... Aren't all scenes with Jigoro kinda cartoony? You seem to never use contractions in Lilly's speech either; I'm not sure if that's consistent with the actual VN, but it certainly makes her sound a bit robotic on occasion. I also tend to write Lilly...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Apr 17, 2020 9:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Please Don't Pass Me By (Lilly x OC)
Replies: 18
Views: 1765

Re: Please Don't Pass Me By (Lilly x OC)

Well, it's not *just* the stiffness though... Tanaka is telling Lilly about herself in excruciating detail including a lot of personal stuf you would not tell anyone you've basically only just met. Expecially considering that a desire for more privacy apparently led to the "situation" a while back. ...