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by Mirage_GSM
Fri Jan 18, 2019 10:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019
Replies: 15
Views: 1222

Re: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019

This one contains some mature themes, but after a discussion with some of the other writers on this forum [] I think a specific warning may be unnecessary. I have to agree, because even after rereading that almost-H-scene a few times, I have no idea what is supposed to have happened while she... bl...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Jan 18, 2019 9:11 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Random KS Discussion
Replies: 3060
Views: 216099

Re: Random KS Discussion

Number 31 is a badass way to cover up a chest-scar...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Jan 16, 2019 1:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lies and Consequences - Lilly Good Ending Epilogue Of Sorts
Replies: 8
Views: 213

Re: Lies and Consequences - Lilly Good Ending Epilogue Of Sorts

Well, let's just say, you have improved a lot as a writer since then :-) That's not to say it's a bad story. Leaving aside the grammar issues - no need to go over them for a year-old story - most of it is quite okay. You managed to paint Lilly - and even Jigoro - in a positive light without laying i...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Jan 15, 2019 5:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Butterfly Dream - Iwanako/Hisao Inversion
Replies: 50
Views: 2579

Re: A Butterfly Dream - Iwanako/Hisao Inversion

It was all as if something out of a romance novel. IMO 90% of all "like" in any given text could and should be replaced with "as if". This is not one of them. “It will take several days, Hmm... Dying my hair never took several days for me, but admittedly I'm not an expert :-) So, I must admit, desp...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Jan 15, 2019 5:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Adventures of Captain Katawa
Replies: 8
Views: 432

Re: The Adventures of Captain Katawa

Hanako Fancopter wrote:
Mon Jan 14, 2019 8:06 pm
I do think it would help a bit if it were written in paragraphs rather than line-by-line, but if it's how you write, then it's just how you write.
Sorry to disagree. That would be the same as saying 'If your writing is bad, your writing is bad. Don't try to improve.'
by Mirage_GSM
Sun Jan 13, 2019 5:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 1-19-19)
Replies: 16
Views: 1035

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 1-13-19)

with a trackpad she was able to trace kanji on in addition to keyboarding. It's true that there are programs that let you do this, but I think that is done mainly when learning Kanji. In my expericene the recognition rate is quite low for Kanji drawn on a tablet or trackpad - especially for more co...
by Mirage_GSM
Sat Jan 12, 2019 11:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection
Replies: 50
Views: 3278

Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Well, at first I thought Hanako was getting a visit by the ghosts of Christmas past, present and future...
Now that would actually make for an interesting story... though maybe better with Hisao being the one visited...
by Mirage_GSM
Sat Jan 12, 2019 11:41 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20190121 Lilly/Shizune Goodness)
Replies: 1737
Views: 208064

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190114 Revenge & Ice Cream)

Yup. Still cute.

Thankfully this time I wasn't eating any cereals...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Jan 09, 2019 11:53 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later
Replies: 8
Views: 229

Re: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later

Huh? "Sabotage" is quite a strong word. To even consider anyone who put this much time and effort into a project deliberately trying to sabotage it is kind of way out there... And frankly it someone really wanted to sabotage a project there would be way more efficient ways to do that than using run-...
by Mirage_GSM
Wed Jan 09, 2019 9:38 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later
Replies: 8
Views: 229

Re: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later

Yes, that life goal she's set herself is not something she only realizes in her good path - it's just that only in that path does she tell Hisao about it. It's a bit corny, but at the very least it is an attempt by A22 to make Shizune more sympathetic and likeable, so that alone disproves the opinio...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Jan 08, 2019 6:33 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Crafty's One-Shots (Dec 25, 2018: Project Blue Curtain [S9])
Replies: 33
Views: 1797

Re: Crafty's One-Shots (Dec 25, 2018: Project Blue Curtain [S9])

Okay, it took me a while to get to read that with so many other stories appearing lately, but it finally happened, and... man what a ride... This not only deserves its own thread, it has easily taken its place among my top ten favourite stories around here. I don't keep a list, so no idea where exac...
by Mirage_GSM
Tue Jan 08, 2019 4:59 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later
Replies: 8
Views: 229

Re: Shizunes Route Analysis, 7 Years Later

Okay, there are a few glaring mistakes - like Misha coming to Yamaku "to be with Shizune" or "contemplating suicide" - and a lot of omissions, especially in the description of the paths after the choice point... And given how insistent the maker of this video is to prove his point I can't help but t...
by Mirage_GSM
Mon Jan 07, 2019 9:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Reunions (S9 Submission)
Replies: 4
Views: 268

Re: Reunions (S9 Submission)

I agree, it's really good for its length.
As for criticism, the first part switches wildly between tenses, which is strange since the second part is perfectly okay...
by Mirage_GSM
Fri Jan 04, 2019 1:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route
Replies: 8
Views: 421

Re: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route

Very nice!
You probably shouldn't have given away that it's about MIsaki. That would have been a good twist for later on...