Search found 6 matches

by Tabby
Sun Aug 30, 2009 9:05 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Top Chef KS
Replies: 10
Views: 2035

Re: Top Chef KS

I don't see the resemblance. None.
The truth is. I only read half your entire post before I clicked the link. So 'she' looked like a Hisao, even Muto, before the name confused me.
by Tabby
Sat Aug 29, 2009 3:34 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Brainport Vision Device
Replies: 15
Views: 2792

Re: Brainport Vision Device

Wow. That's really amazing technology. But why can't you force feed information from a camera into a person's brain? Just hook them up together, and get used to it. Is it too hard to insert a wire into your head and let your brain work out the processing details? Youtube quote: "But can it see why k...
by Tabby
Tue Aug 11, 2009 2:47 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Story for a Summer Assignment (new section added, 8/13)
Replies: 15
Views: 3125

Re: A Story for a Summer Assignment

It was good. I like the characters, they seem natural. I'd like to see it continue. (Shizune + Misha!) Hmm.. It feels like you use too many commas. A lot could be done without them. Or make them whole sentences. That's what I think. Other than that, there's a few typos around. on of her pink curls r...
by Tabby
Mon Aug 10, 2009 6:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: New Game+
Replies: 7
Views: 2967

Re: New Game+

(Re)read all of it! Thanks for all the comments everyone. I fixed it. Less copy pasta. More other stuff.? I have a better structured idea of what to write now. Writing it is the hard part. I think that's the hardest part of writing something. But I believe I'm improving a bit. Also, the story wasn't...
by Tabby
Thu Aug 06, 2009 10:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: New Game+
Replies: 7
Views: 2967

New Game+

A light breeze causes the naked branches overhead to rattle like wooden windchimes. This is a popular retreat for couples in the summer. The deciduous trees provide a beautiful green canopy, far out of sight of teachers and fellow students. But now, in late winter, it feels like I'm standing under a...
by Tabby
Sun Aug 02, 2009 11:18 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Language
Replies: 22
Views: 4339

Language

Hisao: "........" Shizune: "..." Misha: "Wahaha!" Sigh, I even hear Misha's laugh in my sleep.. Shizune: "..." Misha: "Hicchan! Wake up wake up wake up!" Hisao: "Why should I, I'm too tired..." Shizune: "..." Misha: "Cause~! Shicchan said so. And you should do everything Shicchan says~!" Hisao: "Ah,...