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by Critical
Fri May 27, 2011 7:29 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]

With devilish fluidity, Lilly lunged at me, jamming her stun rod deep into my sternum, sending a massive shock through my body. "Gaaaugh!" I cringed as my lungs deflated and contents emptied from my stomach as I was sent sliding backwards and into the wall, hitting it and ricocheting onto the cold f...
by Critical
Mon Aug 02, 2010 5:43 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]

Do you have to end every part on a cliffhanger? Oh, and since when is Artemis a boy's name? Well, it makes it want the reader to want more, except the part where it frustrates them, hahaha. Incidentally, Kiyoshi's thoughts are coming from him, so he just doesn't think that girls have, or should hav...
by Critical
Sun Aug 01, 2010 10:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]

Thank you for your comments! I think now's a good time as any to continue the story since my creative juices are flowing at this hour of the night... or day, whatever you call it. Anyway! Let's get started once again! ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------...
by Critical
Sun Jul 25, 2010 3:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]

Hello all, it's been a while, hasn't it? I've spent some time away from this forum, and now that I rediscovered this thread I made, I suppose I should continue the story. Now... the story was left off at... Kiyoshi left in a hospital after being screwed over by Lilly and Artemis. Let's pick it up! -...
by Critical
Fri Sep 25, 2009 11:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

Final? Maybe. ---------------------------------------------------------- Once. Twice. Three times. I banged my head a final time against the wall trying to make sense of all of the sudden feelings that came over me since the memories of that day and what I was previously. Thinking about it, I was a ...
by Critical
Wed Aug 26, 2009 6:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

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I almost forgot to comment on this. This is one of my favorite fighting games. :D

Also, glad to see you guys enjoying the story. I'll see this to the end.
by Critical
Wed Aug 26, 2009 6:26 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

Here's some more! Enjoy. ----------------------------------- I wanted to hop up from the bed and immediately run to the bottle on the ground and down a few pills to attempt to make this guy go away, but for some reason I just laid there after my comment. The man on the ceiling was still there, smili...
by Critical
Tue Aug 25, 2009 6:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

Don't say "hat," say what kind of hat. "suit" is such a generic term it could mean anything. Otherwise, enjoyable read. Yeah... I kind of messed up on that. I didn't really know how to describe his hat while I was writing so I just left it as 'a hat' and I just kind of lost my luster and decided to...
by Critical
Mon Aug 24, 2009 9:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

I like where this is going, its kinda nice to see a fan fic that doesn't focus on the main characters once and a while. Though i'm a bit curious; i didn't reconize the characters you talked about or names you mentioned. (aside from the main/minor characters mentioned and the Lelouch character) So i...
by Critical
Mon Aug 24, 2009 8:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Re: Forgetful

Good to see that some people liked it. Maybe I should continue it, I kind of like where it's going.
by Critical
Mon Aug 24, 2009 12:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]
Replies: 42
Views: 8820

Forgetful [Updated: Remembrance]

Something random I decided to write, I hope you enjoy. ----------------------------------------- Everything's so monotonous, it's the same thing over and over again. "It's this, and that, and this, and that..." I say to myself in a slightly peeved manner as I toss random things to their respective a...
by Critical
Mon Jun 08, 2009 11:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kenji Ending Cont.
Replies: 12
Views: 2638

Re: Kenji Ending Cont.

o.o

Huh...
by Critical
Fri Jun 05, 2009 11:33 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Student Council Perks
Replies: 5
Views: 2160

Re: Student Council Perks

The transition from the flirting to fooling around on the floor felt a bit rushed and unrealistic. Some grammatical errors. But good none the less. Needs some editing and maybe a few touch ups, few parts didn't flow the best they could of. The Kenji part at the end is amusing though I didn't care f...
by Critical
Mon Jun 01, 2009 10:49 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: What order did you COMPLETE the storylines?
Replies: 85
Views: 11805

Re: What order did you COMPLETE the storylines?

A good question, and I have an answer:

Emi
Rin
Shizune
Lilly
Hanako
Kenji

I kind of had a feeling what would happen if I went for it. I guess I put too much faith in Hisao. I definitely would've ended up with Rin first if I 'Took it easy.' instead of 'Go for it."
by Critical
Mon Jun 01, 2009 10:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Student Council Perks
Replies: 5
Views: 2160

Student Council Perks

Writer's Notes: Misha.That is all. Enjoy. Also, I didn't really know what to call this... I guess "Student Council Perks" was all I could think of. Ah well, here we go~ Misha nodded, "I... I want to have..." she stopped, trying to find the right words, "I... want to do it with you, Hicchan," she sai...