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by Decaying_Orbital
Fri Dec 15, 2023 5:05 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dress Shop Sisters
Replies: 10
Views: 16750

Re: Dress Shop Sisters

This was light, fluffy and cute, I rather liked this story. Well done.

by Decaying_Orbital
Tue Oct 10, 2023 7:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)
Replies: 13
Views: 11727

Re: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)

A perfect short epilogue - nothing missing, nothing superfluous. Totally believable and achingly poignant - bravo! Thank you for the kind words, I've also taken to reading your own series of short stories and have liked what I have seen. I know I'm super late to the game here, but I was only able t...
by Decaying_Orbital
Thu Mar 30, 2023 5:05 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizune's route consensus over 10 years later?
Replies: 15
Views: 34822

Re: Shizune's route consensus over 10 years later?

how long Shizune might have held unrequited love for Hisao This is an interesting take brythain, and something similar that I incorporated into my own fanfic, dealing with Hisao X Shizune following a bad ending Emi route. Even on my very first run of the game, I could tell that Shizune (and/or Mish...
by Decaying_Orbital
Sun Mar 26, 2023 12:38 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Shizune's route consensus over 10 years later?
Replies: 15
Views: 34822

Re: Shizune's route consensus over 10 years later?

I quite like Shizune as a character, and her design (Meganekko girls are 'chef's kiss') for one stuck out as an early contender for me. However, her route could have had a few more choices/decisions to make. I'd almost think that Shizune and Misha should have both been equal options during it, and h...
by Decaying_Orbital
Fri Dec 09, 2022 6:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Akira Oneshots
Replies: 7
Views: 5222

Re: Akira Oneshots

This was super cute, and I really enjoyed reading it. Good job.
by Decaying_Orbital
Fri Dec 09, 2022 6:08 pm
Forum: Fan Works
Topic: Relighting a Scene
Replies: 8
Views: 5950

Re: Relighting a Scene

I think this is outstanding, I really like it. I'd honestly like to see even more of this type of work.
by Decaying_Orbital
Wed Jun 22, 2022 2:59 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 40702

Re: Infinitely More Than We Can Ask or Imagine — A short one-shot (complete)

It's he, mate :P That means it's not Shizune. Kenji would be a more suitable choice. Well what I took away from the piece during this exchange: “And the Other?” “This time he’ll have only one of his there.” “I’ve never understood why he gets to have any at the table with such innocents.” Is that th...
by Decaying_Orbital
Thu Jun 16, 2022 3:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 40702

Re: Infinitely More Than We Can Ask or Imagine — A short one-shot (complete)

Thank you - I've left that as an exercise for the reader 😉 "killed in a car crash" = Emi. "burnt to death" = Hanako "killed playing with her father’s power tools" = Miki "suffered congenital deformities due to the mother’s medication during pregnancy" = Rin W...
by Decaying_Orbital
Sat Apr 30, 2022 5:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Jan 3 2023 - "Dashing Through the Snow..."
Replies: 44
Views: 38936

Re: Any Flavor But Lemon (4/29/22)

Lap wrote: Fri Apr 29, 2022 12:47 pm Any Flavor But Lemon
I do like a good smutfic from time too time, and that was a really good fic. #fansself :shock:
by Decaying_Orbital
Tue Apr 05, 2022 3:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Jan 3 2023 - "Dashing Through the Snow..."
Replies: 44
Views: 38936

Re: Lap's One shots & misc - New S12 Entry 4/4/22

Re: No Good Deed. I read though this and more then once laughed on the entire set up and execution. This is just the kinda thing I could see Kenji doing completely ruining any attempt at being subtle. Emi, Hisao. Yuuko, and Kenji all seemed quite true to character and this was a very enjoyable read ...
by Decaying_Orbital
Mon Mar 14, 2022 4:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.
Replies: 10
Views: 7345

Re: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.

My suggestion, though, is that a) For "Ms. Ibarazaki", if you're going to emphasize the distance, I would further stress it with something like, "THAT Ms. Ibrazaki", or "that *insert negative adjective* Ms. Ibarazaki"; b) For "Emi" The thing is, I don't view ...
by Decaying_Orbital
Fri Mar 11, 2022 9:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.
Replies: 10
Views: 7345

Re: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.

A few points I'd like to discuss (as you know I like looking into details): 1. You used "Ms. Ibarazaki", "Ibarazaki", and "Emi" kind of interchangeably at the start of the passage. Is there any specific reason to do that? Because I would usually address a person consis...
by Decaying_Orbital
Wed Mar 02, 2022 5:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.
Replies: 10
Views: 7345

Re: Game, Set, Match. An Epilogue.

A relaxed take on Shizune helps me to appreciate the character, and you did a good job, really. You achieved to make me like Shizune, in this piece, and for that, I would say "thank you." Really pleasant reading. Thanks very much for your comments Razoredge. My story, while taking place a...
by Decaying_Orbital
Wed Feb 16, 2022 4:58 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: I post things here occassionally.
Replies: 123
Views: 102998

Re: I post things here occassionally.

Cute Miki for sure, thanks for sharing.
by Decaying_Orbital
Sat Jan 15, 2022 6:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)
Replies: 13
Views: 11727

Re: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)

Short sweet and to the point. I think adding anything to it would have only diluted the impact. Great work. Thank you Oddball. This story was actually my first attempt to really keep the word count down. When I started writing my first KS fic, my first (unpublished) work, was sent to the friend tha...