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by Chatty Wheeler
Tue Nov 24, 2020 3:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Alone Again (Naturally) - A Lilly One-Shot
Replies: 9
Views: 368

Re: Alone Again (Naturally) - A Lilly One-Shot

Hello Capn-Cold! Welcome! It's always good to see new writers making their debut on the scene. I'm still fairly new here myself, and I'm working on my own first story, so I know how tough it can be to step up to the plate for the first time... But for your first time, you did quite well, I would say...
by Chatty Wheeler
Mon Nov 23, 2020 10:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Rebound - A Lilly NE Epilogue / Iwanako Story
Replies: 28
Views: 2603

Re: Rebound - A Lilly NE Epilogue / Iwanako Story

Hello Xeraeo! Long time no see, eh? At least here on the Renai, that is! Anyway, I told you at some point in October that I'd get to Rebound at some point, and I'm here today to make good on my word. Let's get cracking... —————————— Prologue: Starting off with that brief prologue... I thought it was...
by Chatty Wheeler
Sat Nov 21, 2020 5:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Feurox's Den of Sadness [04/26/2020]
Replies: 95
Views: 13378

Re: Feurox's Den of Sadness [04/26/2020]

Analysis of Time Is Dancing ——————————————————— Hello Feurox! It would appear that I am a year late to this party, but I've finally dipped my heels and toes into the world of feels and woes. I'm not sure I can say much that hasn't already been said by others about this story, but regardless, I'm go...
by Chatty Wheeler
Wed Nov 18, 2020 9:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)
Replies: 93
Views: 8142

Re: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)

Cell phones were still new—and expensive—in the late 2000's/early 2010's... Hey, it's not that bad. I got a cell phone in '99 and I was one of the last people in my class to get one. It must been different where I live. Most folks I knew didn't get cell phones until the late 2000's/early 2010's. :D
by Chatty Wheeler
Tue Nov 17, 2020 9:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2019 - Story collection
Replies: 54
Views: 8501

Re: Secret Santa 2019 - Story collection

That's one heck of a mistletoe... :lol:

Thanks for writing this! Short, sweet, and charming. Sometimes it's nice to just sit back and enjoy a story like this at the end of the day.
by Chatty Wheeler
Tue Nov 17, 2020 1:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)
Replies: 20
Views: 1100

Re: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)

Hey there, Mirage! Thanks for the response. I appreciate you clearing some things up and pointing out the flaws in my arguments. I'll try to make this shorter than my last post... —————————— I think that these two lines make it quite clear that he's in some sort of vehicle. At the very least, that's...
by Chatty Wheeler
Tue Nov 17, 2020 1:42 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: NuclearStudent's Cursed Zone
Replies: 46
Views: 6069

Re: NuclearStudent's Cursed Zone

Analysis of Until I Rise Again ————————————————— Hello there, NuclearStudent! I'm a little embarrassed that I haven't gotten around to commenting on one of your works sooner, but better late than never, right? I'm glad that you recommended this story to be my first out of your collection of works—I...
by Chatty Wheeler
Mon Nov 16, 2020 7:42 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)
Replies: 20
Views: 1100

Re: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)

Hey Nuke! —————————— In a typical story, we're fed all the necessary backstory right from the first chapter. We are given a clear indication about the history of our protagonist, their current life, their personality, and what their immediate plans are. An interesting difference in perception. As fa...
by Chatty Wheeler
Mon Nov 16, 2020 6:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)
Replies: 20
Views: 1100

Re: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)

Hello Mirage and NuclearStudent! I know that I'm not BristerXD, but as someone who really enjoyed this story, I felt inclined to chime in with my thoughts on your posts. You both had some very thought-provoking and interesting things to say! I'm mostly going to try and explain my perspectives on the...
by Chatty Wheeler
Mon Nov 16, 2020 4:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Chiasmus Through the Night – A Late, Late, S9 for Craftyatom.
Replies: 11
Views: 485

Re: A Chiasmus Through the Night – A Late, Late, S9 for Craftyatom.

Hey Mirage! —————————— That's some legendary foreshadowing right there. Don't think we didn't notice it. Of course Emi wouldn't like who Hisao ended up with! Very clever, Feurox. Well, to be fair there are several possibilities Emi would not have liked :-) Ah, well. I thought to myself that Emi does...
by Chatty Wheeler
Mon Nov 16, 2020 4:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Chiasmus Through the Night – A Late, Late, S9 for Craftyatom.
Replies: 11
Views: 485

Re: A Chiasmus Through the Night – A Late, Late, S9 for Craftyatom.

Hello there, Feurox! Thanks a lot for writing this—it warmed me up like a good cup of coffee. Well, a good cup of hot coco might be more in theme. :D This was an excellent piece—bursting with creativity, charm, and meaning. I really enjoyed trying to piece together all of the little mysteries that w...
by Chatty Wheeler
Sun Nov 01, 2020 9:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)
Replies: 20
Views: 1100

Re: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)

Okay, I think I need to explain myself. I assume that it's fairly obvious that I get a real kick out of analyzing other people's stories and trying to piece together the puzzles that authors embed into their writing. However, at times a problem arises... I'm kind of a stupid idiot sometimes. There i...
by Chatty Wheeler
Sun Nov 01, 2020 4:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)
Replies: 20
Views: 1100

Re: Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain (OC Story)

Hello BristerXD, I just finished reading the first chapter of Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Pain and… Oh boy… This is magnificent. From a technical standpoint, and I say this with both absolutely sincerity and no hesitations, your writing is the best I’ve ever seen in any story on these forums. ...
by Chatty Wheeler
Sat Oct 31, 2020 4:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 22
Views: 4561

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Good day to everyone reading this! I've had this story on my radar for the past month, but only now have I had the chance to sit down and read it! I spent about a week getting myself fully caught up, taking notes and analyzing as I went. There's a lot that I want to discuss, so I'm going to run thro...
by Chatty Wheeler
Tue Oct 13, 2020 7:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)
Replies: 93
Views: 8142

Re: To Miss the Mark - An OC Pseudo-Route (Hitomi)

Lilly's fundamental character flaw as revealed in her route is her fear of confrontation. It's not that she never does it, but she's by nature a very peacekeeping individual, which is part of what puts her at odds with Shizune so often. I don't see it in Lilly's character to "call out" Hisao on thi...