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by Mutty99
Mon May 18, 2020 11:07 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Just a quick opinion about Shizune's route
Replies: 5
Views: 380

Re: Just a quick opinion about Shizune's route

You understood pretty well what I was trying to say. Misha's confession is the climax of a series of negative emotions: the fear of not being needed by others, of being cast apart, of solitude. That last one is even mentioned at some point in her confession to Hisao, I think. As I was saying though,...
by Mutty99
Thu May 07, 2020 10:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

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by Mutty99
Thu May 07, 2020 8:41 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

Re: Hold my Mind - Main Thread

My MC is not Hisao's clone, not even close; they're totally different from each other. I principally used Bold for highlighting people's names in dialogues, and have used it for another purpose only once. Used underline only twice at the end for temporal connections. I agree about the size, will try...
by Mutty99
Thu May 07, 2020 4:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

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by Mutty99
Sun May 03, 2020 12:23 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: The problem with Shizune
Replies: 116
Views: 23234

Re: The problem with Shizune

Here i've explained my opinion in detail.

I like her really much as a character, i can't say the same about her route.
by Mutty99
Sun May 03, 2020 11:34 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Just a quick opinion about Shizune's route
Replies: 5
Views: 380

Just a quick opinion about Shizune's route

WARNING! Spoilers ahead for all routes! [/size] So, Shizune. Great character with an interesting personality. Her route though; that's another deal. I'll explain now why Shizune, in my opinion , has the worst route of the entire game. First, the story has more complex lexical choices: not a defect,...
by Mutty99
Sat May 02, 2020 12:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

Re: Hold my Mind - Main Thread

Will remember about that, thanks.
The prologue is pretty simple and omits a lot of previous events, which will be gradually unfolded as the story goes on, so it's normal if you don't have to say anything about it since it's just a brief introduction.
by Mutty99
Fri May 01, 2020 5:01 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

Re: Hold my Mind - Main Thread

Thanks for helping me polish my writing style. I'll be glad to accept any kind of feedback and constructive criticism! I feel like the hospital segment is necessary to make an impact on the readers before the actual story begins, so i'm keeping it. I've removed warning number 3 and completely revise...
by Mutty99
Thu Apr 30, 2020 1:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

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by Mutty99
Thu Apr 30, 2020 1:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [OUTDATED]
Replies: 10
Views: 658

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Status: Outdated thread

"Hold my Mind" is going through a major plot rework, so I've decided to abandon this thread.
A new one will be opened when the story is finished.