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by woohootouhou
Fri Apr 16, 2021 4:24 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210412 Hanako/Jigoro?)

toughts This is a nice little one-shot. Fits in pretty well with Hanako's route, even though it doesn't really have any real significance. It's just a nice short thing that fills in her thoughts a bit. I really like the ending of the Jigoro story. Honestly, the entire second half of it is pretty nic...
by woohootouhou
Fri Feb 26, 2021 12:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210215 You And I Both)

I really like the interactions between Hisao and Shizune in this. I hate the formatting though. It's a bit depressing, but honestly not that much so compared to a lot of other works.
by woohootouhou
Sun Jan 24, 2021 10:28 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210125 A Runner's Afternoon)

This is about how I would expect an epilogue to a neutral ending would go. Very nice to read, and is open ended enough that it gives a nice satisfying conclusion while also letting your imagination have some space. Also about how I would expect the characters to act after a few years, although that'...
by woohootouhou
Sat Jan 02, 2021 11:26 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201207 The Ooe Way—A Natsume Fic)

The first part was quite a bit better than the second. Felt a lot more natural both with the characters and general pacing.
by woohootouhou
Wed Nov 18, 2020 11:15 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

The first two are the good type of random. The third is the bad. lawl is pretty hilarious just because of how smoothly the transition is, and "That's totally cheating" is a fun gundam crossover, even if not quite as good as lawl. Attack of Drunk Hanako is completely just LOL so random, and...
by woohootouhou
Sat Sep 26, 2020 10:50 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Pretty great descriptions as a whole. Honestly, I think that this is about as good as a story could be when you have so little information about the finished characters. Obviously Lilly didn't end up being quite so filthy rich, but it's still something I could totally see her doing.
by woohootouhou
Sat Sep 05, 2020 6:15 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200824 Zade Wither)

This really isn't as bad as I was first expecting. I think with some "cleanup" of the character, he could actually be pretty likeable.
by woohootouhou
Thu Aug 13, 2020 12:54 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)

It's alright. I don't think it's badly written, but it would've been better if it was all from one perspective instead of the weird paragraph of Hisao's where nothing really happens. That's sort of the issue with this piece- there really isn't any substance at all. It's barely more than what we're g...
by woohootouhou
Fri Jul 17, 2020 10:42 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200713 Scarred Angel)

I've only read through the first part and I'm probably not gonna read further. If you pardon the grammatical errors dotted throughout the story it really isn't that badly written, especially for a non native speaker. However, the first part lacks a lot of substance. A lot of time in crammed into a n...
by woohootouhou
Tue Jun 30, 2020 6:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200629 Queens of the Land)

A really great short story. Silentcook does a great job of making each characters inner dialogue different, even before their disability is taken into account. Obviously the characters act a bit different than they do in works post release, and in the actual game, but the whole story is still totall...
by woohootouhou
Mon Jun 08, 2020 10:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200608 Triple Shot)

Mutou Gets Fired I liked this one, but that might be just because I like Mutou. I think it's a decent enough backstory, but a bit lacking, yeah. For a under 2000 word story I think there was a bit too much focus on him getting fired and not enough on his actual backstory. There were Five I didn't l...
by woohootouhou
Wed Apr 29, 2020 6:36 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200427 Two Flat Jokes)

Rookie error is funny, but there's really not much there other than joking about kenjixakira
OMD was pretty short too, but actually pretty good for a gag ending. That's actually how I would imagine misha acting about that situation.
But man, that ending.
by woohootouhou
Sat Mar 28, 2020 10:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
Replies: 1945
Views: 851713

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)

I think the length of this one was just right too. If it had dragged out longer then It might have gotten a bit awkward with how open-ended it is, but It was just long enough to set up the fantastic tone.