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by woohootouhou
Fri Jul 17, 2020 10:42 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Replies: 1847
Views: 289415

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200713 Scarred Angel)

I've only read through the first part and I'm probably not gonna read further. If you pardon the grammatical errors dotted throughout the story it really isn't that badly written, especially for a non native speaker. However, the first part lacks a lot of substance. A lot of time in crammed into a n...
by woohootouhou
Tue Jun 30, 2020 6:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Replies: 1847
Views: 289415

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200629 Queens of the Land)

A really great short story. Silentcook does a great job of making each characters inner dialogue different, even before their disability is taken into account. Obviously the characters act a bit different than they do in works post release, and in the actual game, but the whole story is still totall...
by woohootouhou
Mon Jun 08, 2020 10:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Replies: 1847
Views: 289415

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200608 Triple Shot)

Mutou Gets Fired I liked this one, but that might be just because I like Mutou. I think it's a decent enough backstory, but a bit lacking, yeah. For a under 2000 word story I think there was a bit too much focus on him getting fired and not enough on his actual backstory. There were Five I didn't l...
by woohootouhou
Wed Apr 29, 2020 6:36 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Replies: 1847
Views: 289415

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200427 Two Flat Jokes)

Rookie error is funny, but there's really not much there other than joking about kenjixakira
OMD was pretty short too, but actually pretty good for a gag ending. That's actually how I would imagine misha acting about that situation.
But man, that ending.
by woohootouhou
Sat Mar 28, 2020 10:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Replies: 1847
Views: 289415

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)

I think the length of this one was just right too. If it had dragged out longer then It might have gotten a bit awkward with how open-ended it is, but It was just long enough to set up the fantastic tone.