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by Talmar
Thu Jul 23, 2020 5:04 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

***** I put the cup of instant noodles on the counter, and press the activate button on the electric water heater. The pantry of this building I’ll be living in took me some time to find; someone in the common room pointed out it’s opposite of the laundry, but I had no idea where the laundry room wa...
by Talmar
Thu Jul 23, 2020 5:03 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

I'm back! And I'm not dead! COVID-19 plus a lot of stuff like exams and prep had occupied large portions of my schedule, and toss in the usual behaviours of ideas, that is akin to cats - they never listen to you and laugh at how helpless you are without them above your heads, led to the rather ... w...
by Talmar
Thu Jun 11, 2020 11:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Thank you for dropping by and bumping up SD, you two! Now, to address the issues while Scene 7 is currently undergoing proofreading... You have a very different take on Hisao. In the game he felt more depressed and bitter, but here he seems just straight up pissed off at the world. It's not a bad ta...
by Talmar
Tue May 26, 2020 5:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Scene 6: Tryout When we get back to class for the rest of the afternoon, the hairband girl’s already back in her seat, now wearing the school’s girls’ jacket on top of her white blouse. She’s still listlessly staring out of the window. I ponder for a moment asking her what’s up or how she is after ...
by Talmar
Sun Apr 26, 2020 8:14 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

I been waiting for this update, honestly the premise has me hooked for the possibilities So we come to the divergence point, and I can't wait to see what you have planned :D Thanks for staying with me the entire three months I was off! I was sort of worried that my story will be on the lower end of...
by Talmar
Fri Apr 24, 2020 12:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

First off, I'm very sorry that I disappeared like that. But hear me out; I was told that I need to basically overhaul the entire initial scenes to better explain Hisao''s behaviour in this pseudo-route. So ... well, after three months of hair-ripping frustration amid the hell that was getting dragge...
by Talmar
Mon Jan 13, 2020 3:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

RIGHT! I'm back! Just in time for another 4 week break in which I'll be offline again. Shoot. To any readers coming here, I overhauled the previous four scenes, three of which to present tense. I sense that it's the core of my tense issues, and lo and behold, no more tense problems in proofreading. ...
by Talmar
Sat Dec 21, 2019 9:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

I'm going to be honest, I really just skimmed through this. Most of this I've already read before and there's not really enough of a di9fference to catch my attention. The only thing that stood out was Hisao asking about the music club and even that was only a few lines. If you need to use a time s...
by Talmar
Fri Dec 06, 2019 12:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Scene 3: In the Nursery I follow them as the two girls descend downstairs, toward what Misha calls the cafeteria. The more I look around, making mental notes of where things are, the more this building gets more confusing. Surprisingly, there’s a floor below the lobby of the main entrance that also...
by Talmar
Mon Dec 02, 2019 2:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Act 1: Reconstruction Scene 1: A Chance “Hello Hisao.” I look up. The voice of someone else other than the nurse chiding me to eat my food rouses some alertness in me, but not a lot. I don’t really care much who it belongs to, but this particular voice belongs to a face I remember seeing, but strug...
by Talmar
Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 18
Views: 2917

Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Okay, uh, first things first. You might notice that there's two threads with the same title, and the same subtitle. By God I hate my past self for being so naive. It's essentially the same story, just with the corrections and proofreading done, and most importantly, ONE CHAPTER AT A GODDAMNED TIME. ...