Search found 5 matches

by Talmar
Mon Jan 13, 2020 3:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 8
Views: 694

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

RIGHT! I'm back! Just in time for another 4 week break in which I'll be offline again. Shoot. To any readers coming here, I overhauled the previous four scenes, three of which to present tense. I sense that it's the core of my tense issues, and lo and behold, no more tense problems in proofreading. ...
by Talmar
Sat Dec 21, 2019 9:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 8
Views: 694

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

I'm going to be honest, I really just skimmed through this. Most of this I've already read before and there's not really enough of a di9fference to catch my attention. The only thing that stood out was Hisao asking about the music club and even that was only a few lines. If you need to use a time s...
by Talmar
Fri Dec 06, 2019 12:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 8
Views: 694

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Scene 3: In the Nursery I follow them as the two girls descend downstairs, toward what Misha calls the cafeteria. The more I look around, making mental notes of where things are, the more this building gets more confusing. Surprisingly, there’s a floor below the lobby of the main entrance that also...
by Talmar
Mon Dec 02, 2019 2:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 8
Views: 694

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Scene 1: Gateway Effect The gate looks far too pompous for what it is. In fact, most of them seem to do that, but this one especially egregious. The tall walls are made of red bricks, black wrought iron, and gray plaster, all assembled into a whole that didn’t feel welcoming at all. If it weren’t f...
by Talmar
Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)
Replies: 8
Views: 694

Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route (Properly)

Okay, uh, first things first. You might notice that there's two threads with the same title, and the same subtitle. By God I hate my past self for being so naive. It's essentially the same story, just with the corrections and proofreading done, and most importantly, ONE CHAPTER AT A GODDAMNED TIME. ...