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by WeaselDaddy
Tue Jun 04, 2019 11:47 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Re: Salvation

Okay, so in regards to this, I just performed a search using a text editor throughout all of the scenes that Shizune was in, be it her route or others, and have found that there's only the possibility of her addressing Lilly by name 7 times or so at most throughout the entirety of the VN (including ...
by WeaselDaddy
Tue Jun 04, 2019 11:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Re: Salvation

"About Hanako and me" - since that is Hisao talking it could just be his mistake, but I thought I'd mention it anyway. Same here, but this time it's not direct speech. "She and Hanako" - this is direct speech again, but this is Shizune, and she wouldn't make a mistake like that....
by WeaselDaddy
Tue Jun 04, 2019 4:14 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Shiina 2
Replies: 11
Views: 5745

Re: Shiina 2

Huh. This was a very interesting take on this particular event, which, as has already been mentioned, really doesn't get explored a lot in fan fiction and the like. It was kind of upsetting, a bit too real, and almost a bit unsettling at the end in a way that ties into established stuff really nicel...
by WeaselDaddy
Tue Jun 04, 2019 4:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Chapter 3

Ring. Ring. Ring. The repeating noise plays havoc on my ears, and I’m so anxious I can almost hear my heartbeat. It’s just a phone call; such an innocuous thing really shouldn’t have me as terrified as I am now. Despite that, my chest is pounding, my mouth feels drier than a desert, and I can’t see...
by WeaselDaddy
Mon Jun 03, 2019 6:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Chapter 2

The Shanghai is about as quiet as you might expect it to be at this time of day. All things considered, that’s a good thing. After ordering some coffee for myself, I feel myself start to relax for the first time today. I don’t think Misha and Shizune have stopped talking once since we began our trek...
by WeaselDaddy
Mon Jun 03, 2019 4:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Re: Salvation

That's a long time to be laying into someone at full volume; Hanako's outburst was probably more like thirty seconds, and it was aimed at the primary target, rather than re-directed at a third party. Even if Hisao had that much fire in him I'd expect him to tire himself out doing it. Really fair po...
by WeaselDaddy
Mon Jun 03, 2019 2:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Re: Salvation

unfazed Oh dear. I've read a lot of books, played a lot of games, and done a healthy amount of writing in my time, and somehow I never processed that this is the proper spelling of unfazed. Oops. Aside from that, I've made a note of the grammatical and spelling errors you've pointed out and will be...
by WeaselDaddy
Mon Jun 03, 2019 3:14 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Re: Salvation

Chapter 1 Frankly, things couldn't have gone worse. I’m not one to fantasize too much about “worst case scenarios” despite my cynical tendencies, but this goes leaps and bounds beyond what I’d expected. “I hate you more than anyone” certainly isn’t a sentence I’d ever expected to hear come out of H...
by WeaselDaddy
Mon Jun 03, 2019 3:01 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Salvation
Replies: 13
Views: 5443

Salvation

So, this is my first time posting here on these forums, and more than that this is my first ever attempt at a fan fic for Katawa Shoujo. I figured I could just get right into it, throw the fic out there, and call it good, but I figure this is as good of a time as any to introduce myself while I'm at...