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by psyxypher
Wed Aug 15, 2018 12:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

It just occurred to me that I forgot to link the new Chapter in the Table of Contents. I think that's enough to convince me to never take a vacation again. Also, it appears that despite the fact I get maybe 3-4 people commenting on a daily basis, I seem to get hundreds of pageviews. That's either a ...
by psyxypher
Mon Aug 13, 2018 8:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's New Hat
Replies: 9
Views: 927

Re: Hanako's New Hat

Not sure how to respond.

Oddly enough, I recently imagined Hanako as a mutant with four prehensile tongues and external versions of skull, ribcage, spine and pelvis. I think that's related enough.
by psyxypher
Mon Aug 13, 2018 1:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Okay, so when I wrote this chapter, I decided to make it just a Hanako Chapter. Not sure when the next Rin Chapter will be. Also, we get to meet some of the art club! Again, sorry this is so late. Chapter 5: Smooth Painter ~~~~Hanako Ikezawa~~~~ Today is a beautiful day. The sun is shining, not a cl...
by psyxypher
Sat Aug 11, 2018 11:33 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Well, since I'm nearly 2 days late and Chapter 5 hasn't been posted, I may as well give an explanation. Chapter 5 is written. It took a while to write. Currently waiting for my beta readers to read it over (one is out of town, the other is oddly silent). However, don't take that as me saying I'm bla...
by psyxypher
Wed Aug 01, 2018 2:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

If I can be honest, that just feels like a defiant misunderstanding of the character. It’s the same sort of reaction I have when I see someone writing Hanako as a social butterfly as a way of somehow objecting to the characterization of her as antisocial. It just doesn’t do a very good job of captu...
by psyxypher
Wed Aug 01, 2018 1:22 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Anyway, Rin Chapter. I have a unique perspective on Rin. Tell me what you think. Sorry to say I don't think it's very Rin-like... Your "Inner Rin" is completely logical and even perfectly self-aware. The only way you distinguish her thoughts from Hanako's in the other chapters is that Rin uses shor...
by psyxypher
Sat Jul 28, 2018 1:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

I’m going to get so much shit for that Chapter Title I just know it. (EDIT: And I forgot to put it that's just fantastic). Anyway, Rin Chapter. I have a unique perspective on Rin. Tell me what you think. EDIT: Though I do ask you provide advice on how to improve, because just telling me what's wron...
by psyxypher
Fri Jul 20, 2018 4:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Post Edited/Censored at mod request.
by psyxypher
Fri Jul 20, 2018 10:32 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

“When you put us both together, we have all of our limbs.” Again lines taken verbatim from the VN... I was thinking about this when I was writing the scene, which is why I explicitly wrote the lines so it wasn't a direct copy of the lines from the VN. Similar, yes, but not the same. According to th...
by psyxypher
Thu Jul 19, 2018 11:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Butterfly Dream - Iwanako/Hisao Inversion
Replies: 51
Views: 4293

Re: A Butterfly Dream - Iwanako/Hisao Inversion

I'm sorry, I couldn't read past Chapter 3. The effort put into making Takashi seem like some kind of scumbag just made this massively uncomfortable for me to read (I just dislike when purely negative traits are ascribed to a character). Which is sad, because I was in love with this concept when it w...
by psyxypher
Thu Jul 19, 2018 4:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Alright, I've kept a schedule so far. Good. Hopefully, I've kept a reader-base as well. Anyway, here's chapter 3. Chapter 4-5 will be from Rin's perspective. A bit nervous with this chapter, since I'm still new to writing this. Remember, your comments/scalding criticisms aren't just welcome, they're...
by psyxypher
Fri Jul 13, 2018 7:30 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Decided to re-write parts of Chapter 1 and 2 so I'm not blatantly ripping lines from the game.
by psyxypher
Wed Jul 11, 2018 11:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Two major points: 1. You slip into past tense a lot - basically whenever there is a paragraph without dialogue you almost always change to past tense. 2. You lifted a whole passage verbatim from the VN just replacing Hisao with Hanako. That's not leaving a good impression. 1. Yes, I am aware of tha...
by psyxypher
Tue Jul 10, 2018 9:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

Alright, Chapter 2 is ready. This is 3 days ahead of Schedule, but since I already have it done and July 10 is Hanako's Birthday, I decided "Why the hell not?" Anyway, here's Chapter 2: Helping Hand(s) Yes, many of the chapter names are going to be puns. I love puns. I'm not apologizing. ~~~~Hanako ...
by psyxypher
Wed Jul 04, 2018 1:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route
Replies: 50
Views: 3236

Re: Odd Friendship: A Hanako and Rin Route

“Never tried it.” she said, firing off words rapidly. “Always too hot. Tea is weird. It’s dried leaves. Leaves aren’t tasty, but tea is.” This one is weird, but not in a Rin way... Has she or hasn't she tried tea before? If not how does she know it's too hot or that it's tasty? Most other SPaG issu...